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Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2005 01:24 CDT
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a good story so far. pity there's only 4 chapters. notes: kagome calls kaede -obaachan (u might wish 2 change ch 3). just in case u didn't know, the kitsune's name is shippou (7 treasures), it is a play on the word 'shippo' (tail). in ch 4, u 4got 2 add -sama when kagome said miroku's name. typo: "...We all just ?NOW from how you act..." unfortunately i don't have any ideas 4 ya. i look fwd 2 the next chapter shld inspiration hit! ja!
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Jamers On: February 25, 2005 22:25 CST
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I just had to say sorry for your lackof reviews on this website-I hope AFF has still been really good to you in the reviews department.
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Reviewed By: Jamers On: February 25, 2005 22:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, first start with my comments. I really like your story so far-it is very original and I think you are going about it the right way.A few spelling errors and single-letter words are missing, but not enough to detract from the story. GOod job, and I hope you continue the story soon. That being said, I have a few things to say that you may like, dislike, think are way out of wak or just not use. I hope you are getting lots of other replies and good ideas from other reviewers. I know personally that I am waiting for some tidbits to come back to InuYasha's memories that might make things difficult or confuse him, and are difficult for Kagome to answer and/or explain. Maybe a demon should pop up and InuYasha's first fight since the 'incident' could occur, or you could explain Kagome's freak out(which i'm pretty sure i know where it comes from)through her point of view. Maybe you could have a wacky chapter that has nothing to really do with where you really want to go with the story-such as a trip to a mall in Kagome's time-just to get the creative juices flowing again. Whatever you decide I am sure to enjoy it and wait patiently(for the first few weeks anyway) for your next chapter. Goodluck and I hope you are feeling better and getting enough sleep.
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Reviewed By: NordicaVB [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2005 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, the last chapter was good (even brought tears to my eyes). The only suggestion I can give now would be for Myouga to make his first appearance (maybe). He was there...Kagome could mention him or he just 'pop.' If not, they could face a demon...Kagome gets into trouble and he instinctly draws his sword (which finally transforms)...but it might be too early for that. Sorry I'm not much help. But I thought I would suggest these...maybe they will inspire you in some way. Well, I hope you find the inspiration needed to continue soon.
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Reviewed By: Cynbad146 On: January 25, 2005 22:55 CST
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I left a review at another site on this story. (Ignore my typos in the other review please.) I really, really, like this story. It is so deep, in feelings. Please do not give up on it. I hope that you will continue it. You really have a talent with your writing ability. Thank You and I hope we get to see an Update when you have a chance! Cynbad146
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Reviewed By: blah;blah On: October 11, 2004 23:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please..PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2004 13:19 CDT
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Wha-ha-ha! Kouga puts in an appearance! I can't wait! ~ ~ ~ Aww... Cutie. It would have been nice to have more of a segue between the flashback and non. Did mediaminer eat your italics?
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Reviewed By: Thornwitch On: September 16, 2004 10:53 CDT
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I've been reading a bunch of your stories recently (its been slow at work) and I really like them, particularly your characterizations. Just one thing, and its been really bothering me. You keep spelling 'bear' -to carry something, as 'bare' -to expose or make naked. Its endemic to the whole fandom, for some reason, and in these stories, Miroku is also always asking women to bare (strip naked?) His child. Wierd. Also slightly disturbing.
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Reviewed By: HMPrune [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2004 19:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a wonderful story - and a great chapter. Inuyasha is free to show how smart he is - even though he has no memory of Kouga he is able to interpret what Kouga is trying to do. If he had his memories, he would be overcome with the emotion of the moment - and would react much differently. The end is a little ominous - just what did Kagome see? I look forward to finding out!
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2004 12:49 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Reviewed By: Mido-chan On: September 08, 2004 10:16 CDT
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Waaaa!! New chapter!! Great doing! I really liked it-- and it got my sweet tooth pretty good that the first thing he remembered was the fated night in spider temple- so dubbed by me anyway.--------- The more i read this, the more i'm convinced that this Inuyasha is what he would have been had he not seen and had to face the terrible things he did as a hanyou.---------- I adore angst and psychology ... they're the formula I always use in my own fics.... and I tell you, what you have here is just the perfect recipe.---------- And what's this? You're capable of insane humour too?? DSE is yours?? Now there, no cheating ;P leave some talent for others will you? ^^ Jk, well done!!
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Reviewed By: HMPrune [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2004 18:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really well done story - you can feel Inuyasha's pain of not knowing who he is and who everyone else is around him. At the same time you feel the confusion of the others who are only trying to help him and have no clue how to go about it. I look forward to the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: escence of me On: August 04, 2004 16:55 CDT
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I love this fic and I can already tell it's going to be one of my favorites. I can't wait until you update again.
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Reviewed By: Keri-chi On: August 03, 2004 20:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fanfic has pulled in my emotions so well! I was worried over Inuyasha, I felt horrible like Kagome! You reeled us in so well! I love how Inu is now using honofic-thingies (No idea how to spell) and how everyone is reacting to the new Inu. Please, please, PLEASE write more!
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Reviewed By: monica21 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2004 23:16 CDT
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i love this fic, i first read it in aff but i haven't been able to get to that site. this is one of my favorite fanfics and it's only the third chapter!!!! keep up the great work and i hope you update soon.
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