| "Smooth Sailing" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: Leslie On: June 01, 2005 20:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am really enjoying this story :) I can't wait for updates. As for your questions, I think you write beautifully, your transitions are smooth, and your characters are developing very well. I did see a small problem, but it may just have been me not reading closely enough: I didn't really understand how Kagome automatically knew that Miroku was talking about a tape. Anyways, great story :) Can't wait to see more.
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Reviewed By: Kogas_mate_and_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2005 04:07 CDT
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Straight 10s! I love your fanfic! Everything is perfect!! Please keep writing!
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Title: Everthings s 10 in my book! Good Job!
Reviewed By: Full_Blue_Moon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 13:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yea yea everything is perfect! Also keep writing! I really want to see what happenes next! c'ya, Shelby
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Title: Review
Reviewed By: Kittencutie On: February 22, 2005 01:17 CST
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I love the story, so please update really really REALLY soon!!!!!!!!! It's so funny with how Miroku acts with Kagome! I can't wait to see what happens when Inuyasha and Kagome meet. anyway, like i said before, please update really soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Xaenthe *nsi* On: February 06, 2005 22:09 CST
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Good new chapter. I like the way you've portayed Miroku's personality. The blackmail is a funny touch, and I have the feeling that it'll come up in a later chapter...lol...The last style of the last chapter and this one flows well, even though it's not on the same subject. I like the way you're drawing out the suspense about InuYasha and Kagome's meeting. I await the fireworks. :) Happy writing! ~Xaenthe
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Reviewed By: Leiko_Kane [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 20:22 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
so far i think all of the areas your worried about are covered. your story flows beautifully and i couldn't catch any grammer mistakes. the characters are well developed and the dialog is good; you've got me panting for the next chapter. please update soon
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Reviewed By: Xaenthe [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 11:36 CST
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Haha, InuYasha the uber-slut! Hmmm, let's see if I can remember your questions. 1) The story flows very well, and I enjoy your writing style. As ALWAYS, and there is absolutely no exception to this rule--there is room for improvement. 2) Grammar is good enough that it didn't interrupt the flow of the story at all--you probably know what I mean, when an author publishes something along the lines of "inuyasha smiled and laghed "haha'and Kagme coildn't help but lagh two." Yours was nothing like that. :)3) Though I wouldn't call it a plot hole, it was more of a vague mention of a plot point that wasn't discussed in-depth, although maybe that was what you intended--the mention of Kikyou when Sango saw Kagome for the first time. And why's InuYasha chasing some chick named Kichi. A stage name? That was my guess. 3) Your characters are, on a scale of 1-10, around an 8. And I'll have to continue this thought later, because I'm going to be late for my Sociology class if I don't scram. Happy writing! ~Xaenthe
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Reviewed By: Blood_lust_Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 01:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good. You really should update. You have a really good story going. I know how it feels to not have many people review your story after you worked so hard on it. I once had 6 chapters up with no reviews but I still plan on continuing it. I have a story on mediaminer that has two chapters and no reviews and I also plan on continuing it. So please finish the story. I would like to know what happens next.
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Reviewed By: . . On: July 27, 2004 12:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the story keep going
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Reviewed By: Mermaid Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 06:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is realy good i hope that you wright more or i sick my virtual dog on you :)
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Reviewed By: BlackX On: July 13, 2004 14:07 CDT
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Well, I liked that for a start. I just hope Inuyasha will not turn out as a total jerk, a little bit, yes, but keep him likeable please. And Kagome and Sango to the rescue (of his personality) :-). Keep going.
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Reviewed By: Inuluvher151 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 06:39 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey great story so far keep up the good work can't wait until you update
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 02:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very funny! But did you have to make Inuyasha a complete slut??? Anyway keep up with it because I want to see how this turns out.
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Reviewed By: ME On: July 12, 2004 21:19 CDT
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Off to a good start!!--should be VERY interesting when Inu and Kag actually meet.....yes, I can see it now.......soft glowing lights, stars in their eyes, blushes on their cheeks, yes! true love at first sight!! NOT!!! like I said--should be good!! *evil wink* update soon!! ~ja ne!
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