| "DBZ High School Style" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] |
Reviewed By: VegetandAru [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 04:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh btw you should try to use more adj (describing words) to give your fanfic a better effect, say how they did stuff. You need to stop abreviating whether it's text talk or writting letters instead of names (like CC for chi chi) It just makes it harder to read, trust me!
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Reviewed By: VegetandAru [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 04:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You use words to often such as 'she said' and 'he said'. You need to use different words to join your sentences instead of just using and all the time. I really enjoyed your fic but you need to try and broaden your vocabulary. Do you have a Beta reader? If not then I'd be happy to help you out. Just email me (becky.burford@mac.com)
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