| "Card Captor Sakura: The Next Quest" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Tanzanite Falcon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2006 23:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this fic is awesome. i love it. please continue and don't listen to grumpy people. this fic is fantastic
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Reviewed By: crazy-chick14 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2006 11:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
HELLO AGAIN! THANK YOU FOR THE NEW CHAPTERS!! YOU'RE THE GREATEST^^ HEHEHE......HOPE YOU UPDATE SOON..~~~~
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Reviewed By: crazy-chick14 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2006 06:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the story it really is great!! writing is suppose to be fun so just write to your hearts content ok? dont get discourage by some people they are probably just BORED.anyway i'm loving the story!! please write more!! keep it up!! ^^
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Reviewed By: Demonic_Kat2001 On: March 21, 2005 07:23 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I just found this one and I really like the story. Please write some more, I would like to see that Charon is destroyed due to how he hurt every one. Also, you put a great cobination of people together for this fic. Congrats!
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Title: CH. 1
Reviewed By: FlamingOak On: July 24, 2004 11:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
First off, lose the gratuitous Japanese. Gaki and Kaiju are sort of okay even though most of your readers won't know what that means. Using Arigato instead of proper English equivalents however, is completely intolerable. Minako and Ami are from Juuban. You're also suffering from the show don't tell problems. I don't really know how to fix that since I'm having a lot of trouble with it myself. Another big issue is bending character reactions near OOC to achieve plot points. It makes them artificial stock characters that don't have any real identity. For example, Tomoyo likes Sakura romantically, which leaves the reader wondering how she falls for Ranma so easily. The entire close knit friendship and convenient pairings by the end of the first chapter just doesn't fly all that well and holds about as much interest as a flat piece of cardboard. What you did do well was that I couldn't spot any glaring grammatical problems during my light read. You have a lot of potential, but lack the knowledge makes each chapter bland. Don't let my review discourage you. I put in the time for C&C because I believe you're a diamond in the rough. Good luck on the next project.
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