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| "Poison" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Reviewed By: FairyMage (not logged in) On: June 26, 2005 00:11 CDT
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-wibbles- WHAT??? THAT WAS THE END??? ARGH!!! You... you... YOU! Wahhhh!!! -roars in frustration- I wanted fun TouyaYukito-ness!!! Awww but the last chapter was such good sweet fluff! XD My love has not been shifted, just EXPANDED. I'd still rather have Touya any day, but that's beside the point. Wait, WHAT? Neither of my fics have been finished! Neither of them are even close! HAHAHAHA I've written then ends for both of them but everything in between that and the beginning is still in the works! XD Anyway, LOVED the story and REALLY REALLY REALLY want the sequel! NOW! XD No pressure or anything...
| Reviewed By: FairyMage (not logged in) On: May 03, 2005 17:57 CDT
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Mmmm hmmm... honestly, it wasn't bad and I understood what happened in Ch. 6 more. Oh no! Sugar is good... ^^ Ahhh, I see. Oh well. No TouyaKaiba yumminess. But that's OKAY! TouyaYukito is better anyway. Yes, sorry about that brief moment of fangirling. It's wonderful! So sweet... MMM Yukito sounds so yummy when he's sleeping! And TOUYA is the one I like! Ah, I see. That's probably a good idea. I don't do that, and my fics end up AGES AND AGES long. Yay! ^^ Does Yuki think about Touya... -squee!-
| Reviewed By: FairyMage [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2005 01:01 CDT
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I read the uncut version of Chapter 5, and I really don't think you should worry about posting it here. It made Chapter 6 make more sense, and it wasn't terrible by any stretch of the imagination.
| Reviewed By: FairyMage (who's not logged in, sadly...) On: April 05, 2005 11:30 CDT
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-meh!- CUTENESS!!! WAH!!! Mmmmm... what's up with Kaiba, now? And why's he so interested in Toya? ^^ I SENSE MORE YUMMINESS!!! Sorry, I get like this when I read good shounen ai/yaoi. I get all hyper and fangirly and excited and babbly... like now. Awww... the end is so sweet! I can't wait for the next chapter! -whines- Why is it only 8 chapters long??? I could read Yukito/Toya forever...
| Reviewed By: FairyMage [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2005 19:00 CST
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I like. Enough said. ^^ It's a very sweet premise, and I especially like that it's told from Touya's point of view. Touya is definitely my favorite character in the manga/anime, so I'm glad he gets some spotlight time. ^^ Also, I like the way you've made it so that I completely emphathize with Touya about Sakura getting married. Whould've thought? Jealousy hurts... I feel bad for Touya.
| Reviewed By: eye candy On: November 30, 2004 09:18 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I think this a great fic. I love how it's a bit of angst and drama and the way Yukito and Touya are becomming friends (and maybe more?). It's great the way it's coming together. You better keep writing! I can't rate your style of writing or grammer 'cause I didn't pay attention to that stuff. When i read i like to get totally envolved in the story and i can't do that by checking grammer. Anyway can't wait for the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Shella-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2004 05:57 CST
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This is very interesting ... of course, it's always nice to find something close to an original concept, but this is a pretty logical way to develop the characters' feelings & situations. I'd never thought about how many friends Touya'd have if Yukito hadn't turned up ... the way you write it it's believable that he wouldn't be close with anybody. Plus his feelings about Sakura are also plausible, not to mention his thoughts on Li. That bit where he said "Sakura's happiness depending on her husband", I'll be interested to see how that gets developed. Personally, I think he should be a bit nicer to Sakura if he really does care about her -- what kind of brother considers not turning up to his sister's wedding? Git-face. But that's just my opinion. You use your own ideas. Uh, is English your first language? Cos there were a number of grammar problems, quite a few actually. If you don't have a grammar check on whatever word processor you use, it'd be a good idea to hunt down a beta reader (draft editor) to go through what you write & check for things like that. Other than that, a very interesting fic. Requires a fair bit of effort to read cos it's quite heavy & weighty, but at least it's meaningful.
| Title: I DID enjoy it! Believe me! >_
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2004 21:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Except for a few whacked prepositions, verb tenses, typos, missing punctuations, and starting sentences with conjunctions (But, And) it was a decent one shot. How can one not enjoy such a simple if melancholy piece?
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