| "Blossom of Power" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: TheEsteemedAyU [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 17:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well because you ALWAYS coment on my art, heres my coment for your fic: Like ski said try to be less ......REDUNDENTREDUNDENTREDUNDENT!! XD (and yes, I DO understant that this was only the first chapter and the others are most likely better ;) )But, other than that it is well written and creative. Hope to read more later (break IS comming up you know!) Love your work, keep it up! ^^
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Reviewed By: babaca [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2004 18:35 CST
Comment/Review:
Well this has potential. Your chapters are too short though. You could probably put all eight parts of your story together and only get a few pages total. What has happened to Sasuke? I guess since you are only writing it from Naruto's perspective we won't know for a while. There are a few typos... I see charka a lot in fics and I'm fairly certain it should be spelled "chakra". What a sucky first assignment for Naruto and Sasuke. Killing Sasuke's brother. Although had you taken the story from Sasuke's perspective we could find out how he really felt about the assignment. Would he be nervous because he didn't think he was strong enough (Itachi's usual bait to irritate his brother) or hellbent on getting his revenge. Keep writing though. It will be interesting to see where you take this.
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Title: TITLE?OF A REVIEW???INTERESTING.....
Reviewed By: SKEEKING [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2004 19:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
HIHI THIS IS GOODGOOD TRY NOT 2 REPEAT THE SAME WORDS U ALREADY USED IN THE SAME SENTENCE....LIKE THAT SENTENCE IF THAT MAKES SENCE....LOL OTHERWISE ITS VERY EXCITING MAKE IT LONGER THOUGH AND TRY NOT 2 MAKE ALL THE ACTION HAPPEN RIGHT AWAY IN THE BEGINNING OF THE STORY. KEEP THE READER(S) SUSPENSED HOWEVER U SPELL IT AND HAVE THE CHARACTERS MORE...HOW SHOULD I PUT IT...MORE...TENSE WELL THATS NOT REALLY THE WORD BUT IF UV EVR READ THE BOOK INKHEART THEN I THINK U\\\'D GET WAT IM TRYIN 2 SAY OTHERWISE KEEP GOIN AND HAPPY WRITING :) PS: I LIKE THE...O GOSH DARNIT...WATEVA THEY\\\'RE CALLED...THOES DETAILED WORDS DESCRIBING THE NOWN/NOWNS LOL I LOOK 4WARD 2 THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!! PSS: 1=BAD 10=AWSOME (RATING ABOVE)(obviously)
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