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| "Egypt Bound" Reviews/Comments [ 72 ] | | Pages (5): [ 1 2 3 4 5 > » ] | Title: INU! XD
Reviewed By: Mika Sono [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 18:50 CST
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I'm totally in love with this fic so far! it has a great, deep plot and wonderful characterisaions. but one things been naggin me....isnt it "Ra" not "Re"?? because if i'm reading this right, ur using "re" as the name of the Sun God, which is "Ra" that was just buggin meh ^^U mika-chan -^_^-
| Reviewed By: lemon_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 01:01 CST
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don't forget to update :)
| Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: ssp51201 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2006 01:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you so much for updating. And I totally understand what it's like to go through bad cases of writer's block. I had to put a couple fics on hiatus for that very reason. Honestly, one of them has been on hiatus for at least a year now. Your fiction is always worth the wait, and I'm just glad they're back together again, and that they are well. I am so looking forward to the next chapter. Especially since they will each have to share rooms with their...'Men'...Heh heh heh...Very tempting to read *nods*
| Reviewed By: vtchachi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 19:23 CST
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Okay, so I totally do not beg for updates, but man I miss your updates! I hope you are just busy living life and will hoepfully find your way back soon. Miss your story!
| Title: FFRG ch3
Reviewed By: White_Winged_Atlantian [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2005 20:30 CST
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This is an interesting take on Inuyasha, it's an alternate world and though I have not read the first chapters it looks interesting. Over your story, you could have more description of the other people in the dances, the food, the lights and decorations, but other than that you're only lacking in fodder for your story. (Even a good base work needs to be fed, like a pet) As far as chapter consistency, you could foreshadow of what is to happen in Egypt, or why they were going during the chapters, but not in every chapter. Thank you for submitting to the FFRG and keep it up.
| Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Finalfantasy7 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2005 21:27 CDT
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Thank you for submitting to FFARG. Hmm...this is a very interesting set-up for an Inuyasha fic, but it appears to be a good one. The fact that it is very well-written and pertrays a high-class British set-up makes the story flow fairly nicely. Since I only read the submitted chapter, I admit I do not know quite what is going on, but I find the twist in the series rather fetching. I didn't personally notice any major mistakes in your writing, it appeared quite neat to me. The only thing perhaps, were the usage of quotation marks, but I only noticed one place within the chapter that it occured. However, it was anything that hindered your story. Overall, I found your chapter to be quite nicely done and will continue to read on. Nice job.
| Title: ffrg review---chapter 1
Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2005 23:58 CDT
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Thanks for submitting your piece for review, feel free to specify a chapter in the future as we only review one at a time. I am not the world's bigger AU fan, but your piece has captured my attention. Your grasp of historical fact and the way you've managed to capture the flavor of upper class British society is just wonderful. You a good eye for detail, but I would cautions against using lists in your descriptions... I might have only noticed it once, but when I read a list of characteristics, it kind of jumped out at me. I think you have a very interesting idea here. Thanks for sharing your piece and I wish you luck as you continue writing.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2005 10:30 CDT
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Ah! I'm so glad you submitted this to FFARG to be reviewed. You didn't submit which chapter specifically, and we only do a chapter at a time, but I decided to review the first two. It was enthralling, and I love stories with historical flavor. You payed great attention to detail, and the story was very visual. Also, you set up the plot quite nicely, and it made me want to read on. Great job! As far as suggestions go, I can only make one. When you do an action, such as a "sigh", it will look more professional if you write something like, "She sighed softly before replying, ...." instead of *sigh*. You would never read it in books the way you have it written in your fic. However, this is just a minor detail, but was the only criticism I could come up with! Great job, and I look forward to reading the rest of your fic. Feel free to submit a chapter at a time, starting with chapter three, each week to FFARG if you wish. I truly enjoyed your story!
| Reviewed By: vtchachi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2005 19:10 CDT
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Hilarious chapter! I really enjoyed this one. I loved the whole Inuyasha can't get her out of his mind and then seeing her naked! Too funny. Sad about the whole crew being killed. You are really building up the suspense. Will they make it? Will they find Inuyasha? You are really giving Kagome some more layers and I am really enjoying her character development along with the other four main characters. Can't wait to read the next installment!
| Title: Kewl story
Reviewed By: duranrox [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2005 14:22 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story. You are a great writer. Keep up the good work and update soon. :)
| Reviewed By: lemon_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2005 22:28 CDT
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wow... i don't think i've read a better fanfic or a fanfic so informed.... it was full of information that i now feel that im a master at ancient egypt history... please update soon
| Reviewed By: silvermoon maru [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2005 13:28 CDT
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I'M SO GLAD YOU UPDATED, I REALLY LOVE THIS FIC, CAN'T WAIT FOR INU TO REALIZE HE IS IN LOVE WITH HER. POOR GUYS, WHERE ARE THEY GOING TO GET SUPPLIES??
| Title: YAY!!!
Reviewed By: ssp51201 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2005 01:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! Welcome back! I understand how it can be with life getting in the way. I went through that this summer as well with moving, losing my job, and getting used to a new one. So, do waht you can and I will wait patiently. I thuroughly enjoyed this chapter, as I have the previous 19. I hope Inu won't be missing for far too long, knowing he got out, thank God. And you know I am more than willing to give you praise and encouragement, knowing how important it is to receive that from readers. Hope to see another chapter soon *hug*
| Reviewed By: tanwen-whitefire (not logged in) On: September 18, 2005 13:28 CDT
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OKAY OKAY!!!! yteesh, i'm reviewing! well, ANYWAY, awesome chapter, and i really hope you can find time to update soon! twas really awesome1 ^^
| Reviewed By: vtchachi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2005 20:13 CDT
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Welcome back! I hope you had a great time and I know I am dying to hear about it. You should write a little bit about your experience in the A/N. What a perfect chapter to start back up on. It has a little bit of romance, anguish, and suspense in the end. A great way to get all the readers back into the story after the break. I am on the edge of my seat now...I mean Naraku paying for Kagome and her family just deceiving her this whole time! And Sango and Kagome's fathers being friends or at least knowing one another…the plot thickens! And Inuyasha keeping himself closed up…I know he means well, but come on. I can't wait for the next installment. Thanks for continuing...I had no doubts, but still thanks for sharing this with us.
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