| "Red Snow" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2004 18:06 CDT
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this is great is she that powerful please updte soon
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2004 19:38 CDT
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please update soon
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Reviewed By: Reviewer0000 On: October 06, 2004 02:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't read your story. From what I've seen it's good. But why do you not have the first words of each lines? Why do you type so oddly? I'm surprised you can even understand it. You would recieve more reviews if people understand. For some reason you may joy the way you type. But not many others will. You need to consider your readers when writing a story. You have to ask your self. "Will they understand?" "Can they read this?" "Am I pleasing others with my style?" Your story is good. I'm sorry if I have bothered you but it is the thruth. One reviewer has already commented on this, but you haven't changed it I see. If you are maybe a very young grade schooler then I suppose I can understand why you type that way. I would feel embaressed if I have anything like that on the internet for hundreds to see. It gives people the impression that you have no grammer skills.
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2004 14:08 CDT
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wow this is great please update soon
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Reviewed By: snowecat On: October 01, 2004 13:09 CDT
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You seem to be missing sentences and words and you are forgetting to capitalize like crazy. Your paragraphs also need to be broken up better. Grammar is also needing work. It looks like a gigantic run-on sentence. It seems you care about your work as I don't see any spelling errors, but the way your story is now is very confusing and jumbled. Please fix this.
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2004 20:24 CDT
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wow what do she have to do to get them to understand anyway this great please update soon
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2004 19:58 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2004 18:52 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update
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Reviewed By: oashisunoyume [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2004 18:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
very good..cant wait to read more ^_^
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2004 22:03 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Reviewed By: Sarah hates Kikyou On: September 01, 2004 15:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
Love it
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