Reviewed By: Animefreak11 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2004 12:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
Am I the first one to review?? O.o well i want to say it's a good first chapter... and without being mean or anything i just want to tell you you should try and space a little more your text because it's really hard for us to read it like that, another thing is it normal that it seems like there are words missing about the talking? and that's it for my 'criticism' which i don't call it like that... i'm just really confusing you aren't i??? well i was not trying to be 'miss smarty pants...' just helping you improve your writting skills...^_~ anyway... UPDATE PLEASE! ^_^
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