| "Under Anothers Watchful Eye" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2008 21:09 CDT
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I'm sorry to say that I was sorely disappointed by the ending. It was rushed, unoriginal, and lacked the depth that the rest of your chapters did. I did enjoy most of the story, but I strongly suggest rewriting the ending.
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Reviewed By: missbritt [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 13:43 CDT
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hey its really good so far its seems to be getting better every chapter i read well i hoper you keep it up ok i so cant wait to see wha happens :)
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Reviewed By: Inubutterfly [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2005 19:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am really really enjoying you fic! I can hardly wait for the end. You are a very talented writter and your work is really thought out. A few things tho.. Some parts seemed to be excessivley long winded, and lacking action. I found myself skipping paragraphs to get to something interestring. When Miroku is thinking about his family for example. There were many other parts as well. It's not that it is necessiarly bad that they are in there, it shows how much developement you have given the characters and your dedication to create a really through and realistic story. These parts were really deep. But after a while it seemed to get repeatitive and boring. Some parts wern't really adding to the story. I tended to skim them until I reached some action. On the other hand, I have read too many stories that just simply skipped over the whole thought process of characters and just stated the conclusion. Like when Inu finally realizes he loves Kagome. Sometimes this is just a sudden thought that jumps out and I really liked how you brought Inu to that conclusion. I also noticed several grammar mistakes as well that occassionally made the phrase hard to understand. But aside from the forementioned, this is one of the best stories I have ever read on MM and I really enjoy reading it and you write like a professional. Keep up the fine work!
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Title: cheese
Reviewed By: cheese34523534534534535 On: July 17, 2005 23:47 CDT
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wow.....most boring fanfic ever, i mean takes such a long time for anything really good to happen,should try to make better stories that won't bore the reader to death
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Reviewed By: Selenity On: April 24, 2005 17:39 CDT
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Amazing story! Please update soon!
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Title: please write more
Reviewed By: jupiterangel666 On: March 17, 2005 22:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is an awesome fanfic so far. i've only read till 23 but i've enjoyed it to no end.please hurry and write more. thankyou!!!!
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Title: another great job
Reviewed By: anime fan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2005 22:35 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its me again ^.^ how is that family thing? hope it is all better now. anyways, good chappie. update soon, please.
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Reviewed By: crazydontcoverit On: February 21, 2005 12:27 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that was great. its really starting to get interesting. hurry and update fast PLEASE!!!!
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Title: another good job!
Reviewed By: anime fan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2005 23:18 CST
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way to go. i'm sorry about whatever the family emergency was. it sounds ominous. hope all is well now. i'm glad you finally updated. hope the next time you update it is sooner. btw- the way you discribed the ending of this fic, worries me :S
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Reviewed By: lover of obvious couples On: January 24, 2005 20:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWESOME!!!!! I hope we free kagura too.....and how is kagome going to find inuyasha without narku picking up her scent? so many questions @_@ I hope you update real soon ^-^ also if u want confuzzeld_mind@yahoo.com is my e-mail chat or whatever! *please no spam and rude remarks thank you*
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2005 13:30 CST
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*smashes kikyo w/ large hammer* haha! love ur story update asap kk? u do & we all b happy. *continues 2 smash pieces of kikyo in2 smaller pieces w/ hammer while laughing maniacally* muahahahaha!
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~not logged in On: December 05, 2004 23:49 CST
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AGH!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! that clay pot really needs to be smashed...pronto. come on inu-boy, open your damn eyes. that was always one thing i hated about Kikyo (and still avidly do), she so wants to drag him to hell with her but hey, they both got a second chance at life, she's the one runnign around with a butcher knife in her sleeve waiting for the right time to stab him in the heart...again...for the bilgilonth time. GRRRR.....update soon and if you can't tell, excellent addition to the story!!!!
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~not logged on On: November 29, 2004 13:09 CST
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great addition to the story.so cute those two are. you had me worried for a moment about inuyasha and living with the wounds, but as always, bakayasha recovered. keep it up, the story is comming along great.
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Title: WOW!!!!!!
Reviewed By: HanyouBabe [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2004 09:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gosh your storey is amazing,there were some minor spelling errors like gental...it's spelt gentle...but your writing style and creativiy is outstanding....I encourage you to continue with your storey!
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Reviewed By: RavenShadow [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2004 11:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really great story!!!! I sat up most of the night reading. I hope you get a chance to update soon! I am dying, please!!!
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