|"Cherry Blossoms" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ]|
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Reviewed By: Blue-~-Angel On: September 20, 2005 01:04 CDT
Style of Writing: 6 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10
That was really short :S But, i got a feeling that Sora is Sora from Scramble-B, if you know what i mean... that mangga...
| Title: This needs so much work|
Reviewed By: bimbamba On: April 05, 2005 07:41 CDT
First of all; yes, it is too short. Second, why do you write so much about characters we already know if the story is not about them? Third, Tsunami is unacceptable as a surname, and really quite tasteless. Please remember that a good first chapter includes setting and the introduction of the plot. As it stands, your entry fails to create any interest. It is also quite difficult to see why we should care about this Sora person.
| Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2004 18:42 CST|
um...that was really short...um...wow, try a whole paragraph with actual things happining next time...um...