Reviewed By: Dark Angel 666 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2004 22:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well not sure what do say. It lacks in detail, and jazz. But that's my opinion but this has potential...just take ur time and put more attention to detail. That's what makes a good story great and teh first paragraph but again...that's just me. You've got a good story line and I like where it's headed but again I emphsize the DETAIL! One more thing...don't rush it. It felt rushed. Anyway...good job and can't wait for the next chapter.
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