| "Raiden Youkai no Noroi: Zasshu" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Araxiel [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 13:42 CDT
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Update! Update! Update! Update!
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Reviewed By: Araxiel [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2005 18:00 CDT
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Reikka_shinnen. You talk bull. I understood her story perfectly. Woot! Can't wait for the next chapter. Update soon, and don't let people like that get you down ^_^
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Title: uhhh...
Reviewed By: Reikka_Shinen (not logged on) On: April 10, 2005 18:10 CDT
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Well...Uhh, what's there to say?...Okay, I thought that it was okay. I thought the story line was very creative and original but it was really complicated. For instance like, Hiei would be holding her and then he sets her down but then she's in his arms again. Or like it would talk about her brother and then it said the name Midori and I assumed that Midori was her brother, but then it turns out that Midori is her friend. I don't know but I really didn't understand alot of the things that were happening. It was just to vague. Also, another thing I didn't like about it was that you used way to many Japanese words and half of them weren't even used correctly. I mean we're not Japanese! At least most of us aren't. So we can't understand what's going on sometimes. I can understand some Japanese, but even what I was able to read didn't even make any sense.Another thing was, is Rai her name or the name of the clan? You just didn't explain things very well. And the girl that Hiei found was that the girl they were looking for or was she just some girl? I just don't know!!!!!!!!!!I really think that if you follow my advice and start your story over I think it would be tons better. Because you have a great storyline and you seem to know how you want your story to go but I think if you started it over and worked a little better at it and took your time, it would be really good. Thank you for your time. ^_^
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Reviewed By: HIEI LOVERS [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2005 20:24 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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UPDAAAAAAAATTTTEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Blair E. Buhler On: October 10, 2004 15:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wahoo! I'm glad you're back too! I loved your story the first time, and I'm sure I'm going to love it even more this time. I like the half-crazy thing too...good touch. Keep up the good work!
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