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| "The Colors of Life" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: sirbartonslady (not logged in) On: September 02, 2005 23:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
I enjoyed it, but there was one major thing that just really got to me wrong -- you keep changing tenses. I never much liked "present" tense stories anyway, but you oscillate between present and past tenses. Not as badly as some people do (some do so within a sentence) but it still was very hard to for me to keep track of the tenses. MM.org's formatting made reading a real headache too (not your fault, obviously) I'm intrigued. Very intrigued.
| Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2005 18:51 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I likes...
| Title: Washuu Ogami
Reviewed By: Washuu Hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2005 21:25 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What a unique plot!! Your characters were written so authentically I could practically hear them uttering your lines (good thing you'd so considerately included translations, else my mind would've had to supply scrolling subs, LOL)! Kaede in particular was so marvelously articulated--actually, everyone was. The action was terrific, pacing perfect. Loved the inclusion of Inuyasha and Kagome's deepening bond...*niiiiice*, and Miroku, Sango, Kohaku and Kagura were portrayed brilliantly. IMO, you'd certainly achieved your aim of writing an episodic piece that could be inserted within most places of the entire IY run (I too have the fansubbed eps + 3movies).Thanks for the enjoyable ride, and I hope to see more. Perhaps an I/K fulfillment? ;)
| Title: *Applauds Author*
Reviewed By: Aquamarine [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2004 17:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the more injoyable IY fics I've read. I love that this story is written in the present tense - it's different and refreshing. The plot is unique (that's rare in this genre...) I also love the way all the different characters interact - it's not just about Inu/Kag and Miro/San. Souta is so cute! Oh, and I love Myoga in this story! Just one suggestion - I know it's VERY hard to write a narrative in the present tense without reverting to the past tense. There are some times in the story where you switched tenses. It's not that big of a deal, but you might want to double check that.
| Reviewed By: LadyOrion(notsignedin) On: November 29, 2004 04:38 CST
Comment/Review:
OMG rolls on the floor this is soo funny goodness as soon as souta started drawing on reagular paper I was like LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL "oh this can't be a good sign" lol so looking forward to the next chapters LOL wipes tears from eyes 'Orion
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