| "Dragon Souls" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: DarkAngelB [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 23:29 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 2: Meaghan and Lloyd looks like a would be coupling if you decide to go through with them getting together. I think you did A LOT better on this chapter with the spacings...VERY VERY easy to read thank you sooo much! I hope Dart dies...He is so annoying...Lol. Well anyways I was a little confused with what was going on because it seems like you jumped around a lot from scene to scene with just random things happening which is fine because its a bad habit I also need to get out of. I wonder off my main plotline which screws everything up for me...A LOT. Well anyways cannot wait to see what happens to Dart and Meaghan and Lloyd. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: DarkAngelB [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 22:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty good so far I'm enjoying it so far. But try spacing everything apart more because (especially on this site) Its very confusing because of the small letters and you cannot read it all that well. Besides that I'm liking it.
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Reviewed By: shadow child [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2004 11:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Pretty good, pretty good. two things to say; I don't think you organised it well, try using more paragraphes, and you rushed.... very literate though...
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