Title: Short, Shorter, Shortest
Reviewed By: Dee-chan (sign in?) [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 20:31 CST
Comment/Review:
This is such a dramatic plot. I mean how weird can you get when one girl looses absolutely everyone near and dear to her heart? You could make this story at LEAST ten chapters long, a mystery with loads of suspense, lots of history, but instead you chose to cramp everything into one chapter that attempts to teach us that life is...death? Stories don\'t always need an achingly painful theme. They can be simply entertaining. You can do BOTH here. There\'s a lot of potential in this fic, and I REALLY hope you rewrite this, elongate it! Best wishes, I can\'t wait to see what you do!
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