Reviewed By: OzZ Cometh [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2004 23:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, this is a keeper, no doubt about it. You're probably the best I've seen as far as TT is concerned, and that's no lie or attempt at kissing ass (Just ask some of the other people I review). The characters are portrayed to the T, you utilize very good analogies, at the seemingly perfect time, and the atmosphere's easy to imagine. However, it won't kill to use the word 'and' every now and again. Skim over some of the lines, and I'm sure you'll see what I'm talking about. You tend to link descriptions together using commas, commas, and more commas, alot of the time when they 'really' weren't all that nessicary. Sometimes such structure makes things seem more dramatic, but it really just got to be redundant in this fic. Also, this renders no damage to the fic's quality, or it's author's ability (And it may also just be my PC's fault, as it is crappy and evil) but I think your formatting may be mildly screwed up. If it turns out not to be, then its probably just me, but hey, better safe than sorry. Terribly sorry about your cousin's passing, and I'll definantly be reading (and, of course, reviewing) your other stuff, and whatever you may come out with. Take it easy-JackoMegane
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