Reviewed By: Clairice-Sarah [unlogged] [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 15:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty good so far for your first fic. You should try to make the plot and wording flow a little better (how can I explain that...hmm). Use more interesting vocab, make it sound more like these demon lordesses are from the Sengoku Jidai, and not from this time. You play the original characters very well however, and there should be a little dispute between Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha later, just to make Sesshoumaru looks bad XD. I'm so mean to the characters. Thats why they hate me ^_^. Remember the swords now - Tetsusaiga (or Tessaiga) and Tenseiga. Sorry. Its like i have to correct... At least you spell Sesshoumaru's name with the "u" ^_____^ oh btw this is Lor =P la la la
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