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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2006 07:31 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Love this story! Great plot, great set-up, great writing! Is it finished on another site, maybe? If not, even though it's been quite a while since you've updated, I hope you get a chance to finish it! I want to know what happens next!!
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Title: hn
Reviewed By: Sexi3_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 10:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwww. c'mon, u haven't updated yet ... update soon! plz! by da way ... I WANT HIEI/KAGOME pairing ... plz
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Title: hn
Reviewed By: Sexi3_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2005 07:32 CDT
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wow! thats good! i want kagome/hiei pairings!
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Title: hey
Reviewed By: Eternal Kenmei J.M. On: July 18, 2005 15:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'd say that it's been more then three weeks. Now would you kindly update.
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Reviewed By: toolazytosignin On: July 10, 2005 10:16 CDT
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Great story so far. Only thing that kinda bugs me to far is the Japanese... You don't put an 's on a Japanese word when speaking in plural. It's just not done... sounds icky XP I guess if you want to be perfectly clear you could point out the amount, like "pulled out a stack of ofuda" or something, anything, as long as you don't add the an 's' to the end! Oh, another thing... "daijoubu" itself is usually "I'm ok" "daijoubu ka" or "daijoubu desu ka" is "are you alright?". Although I'm sure it's often shortened, it could confuse people if you have someone ask and then reply with the same word XD I also suggest you not use "ningen" "onna" and such in an English sentence, it's just really awkward sounding. It messes up any flow you may've had. I know a lot of people do it and all, but it sounds awful. I suggest taking a few Japanese classes to avoid butchering both the language, and your story.
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Reviewed By: starwind327 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2005 00:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
omfg. hilarious. i especially like the part with hiei. lol. of course, that's understandable. hoping this is hiei-kag fic, but it's pointing to kurama-kagome - usually not my thing, but at the same time... YOU WRITE SO FUCKING WELL! lol. please update before i EXPLODE.
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Reviewed By: Shabopo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 01:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can never remember if I've reviewed or not, so if this is a repeat, sorry 'bout that. Heh, do you know how much I love this story? It's so incredibly well-written...! I think I'm still the obnoxious reviewer begging for the pairing to change to Kag/Kur, as I don't think any of the others could kill Sesshoumaru. [sigh] The whole angst thing is so well-done! ...twisted. You had to wonder last chapter- did he save Kirara, Kouga, Miroku, and Sango because he grew to care for her, or was he being his sadistic self? And we find out. He's still a sexy sadistic taiyoukai with a yen for causing humiliation.
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Reviewed By: Baby_red On: April 25, 2005 09:17 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was great!Now pls. do update or my sexy boy assassin will come and get you.
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Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 00:13 CDT
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Hi's! I love how you did this chapter! Hiei being really ticked off is such a funny thing, especailly without his katana, ne? I find it very hilarious. Poor Kagome's mom, she has to worry about her little girl a lot now. Kurama and Hiei are defintely going to the shrine with or without permission. They should stay away like they were suppoed to. Who knows what dangers will happen!... except you, the writer. Anyway, love how you did the chapter! Really fun and enjoyable. I really can't believe this is a Hiei/Kagome pairing with Kurama being her close friend. There defintely will be jealously going around in this story! Please update soon! *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
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Reviewed By: InuKitsuneMiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 19:39 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amazing story. I haven't read a crossover this good in ages. Very interesting, please write more. I can't wait for Kagome, Hiei, and Kurama to meet! I enjoy Kagome/Hiei very much, but from that part where Youko and Kagome met, it almost makes me want Kurama/Kagome. Almost :3 Small catch, Kilala is spelled Kirara, from what I've heard. Otherwise, immpeccable (I can't believe I just said that word) spelling and grammer. Congratulations on an awesome fic!
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Reviewed By: tbiris(not logged in) On: April 17, 2005 19:49 CDT
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that was interesting.
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Title: Ignore the idiot...
Reviewed By: InuMiko(nsi) On: April 17, 2005 18:48 CDT
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Hey, I just wanted to tell you that I love your story, and I am in my mid forties. So please ignore the idiot who said that your story would only appeal to teenagers. Don't let anyone discourage you from writing. Your writing style is refreshing, and you have a lot of fans. :) Hope you update again soon! Donna
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Reviewed By: wynter89(mm) On: April 17, 2005 16:17 CDT
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wow, i really like it, cant wait for an update!! i am more interested int kag/kur relationships. and with the way you started it i was like "you go kurama" anyway really loved it. good luck may kami-sama be with you
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Reviewed By: Kuramas Gurl (too lazy to log in) On: April 17, 2005 16:04 CDT
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weeeeeee, good chapter. I wait for the next one. ja ne!
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Title: Since you appear to want it so badly
Reviewed By: Kei, arcticslap@yahoo.com On: April 17, 2005 14:49 CDT
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If you consider this "trivial," you can expect your work to always be mediocre. Details make or break a story. Yet many readers don't know the difference, so you get away with it. For example, Hiei's mother was koorime. But unless you're saying he's a hermaphrodite or a clone, he isn't one himself. One of those 'unimportant' details. As you attempted to say, it's your prerogative to use Fangirlese. Don't act surprised when you get reviews like this. It's also mine to read and reply when you do. Yes, Yoshihiro Togashi(one creator since we're nitpicking) has a fondness for puns. But you obviously have no respect for the intricacies of the Japanese language. If you truly had someone fluent in it, they would have corrected your misuse. A single word often has MANY meanings dependant on usage and kanji. Alteration of words by a mangaka comes from taking kanji and splicing it. But when you've proven less than proficient in English, it would be unfair to expect you to grasp that concept. That said, there is nothing compelling to your work. It's not the character having an experience. It's you saying the character is having an experience. You lose sight of characterization and fail to hold to dynamics of individual personalities. Your prose stagnates in trying to be dramatic. Your plot is both contrived and juvenile. Lacking real depth and imagination. But don't fret, you might still be popular among 14 and under. And BTW, it's boxers. Not everyone is female.
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