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| "Gundam Lullaby" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: o.o
Reviewed By: Pyro Amedaus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2006 18:51 CST
Comment/Review:
I hate country and I bought that song. Good, sad, powerful. I like how you changed the genders around. Beautiful lassie, just beautiful.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2005 12:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting to FFARG! I want to say that your fic was interesting overall and shows real promise. There were a few things I noticed, however, that did detract from my complete enjoyment. First off, grammatically, your fic could benefit from a sound beta with specialty in punctuation as there are a few rough spots with such things. Capitalization needs addressed, as well, since there are a good number of words that don't need it. For an experienced reader, that draws attention away from the overall story for me. There are a few confusing statements, such as 'He won't be on alert, let alone his best guard." This really didn't make sense to me. Another couple of things that I wanted to mention were the use of numerical characters. You should take the time to spell them out. It lends a more careful feel to your writing, and it is better not to use multiple punctuation or all caps to get the message across. Italics work wonderfully. One exclamation point does show the right emotion. I must say, though, that overall, the feel of your fic is good, and the foundation skill of basic storytelling is there. With a little more polishing, you could really create something wonderful, so please don't give up! Thanks again for submitting to FFARG!
| Title: Totally Speachless
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2005 21:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*takes a deep breath* THAT was DEEP! I had NO idea that you could write like this! I was captivated the whole entire time. First Relena and then Heero all because of him and Duo.... I'm just glad that you didn't kill off Duo as well. The body count's gotta stop somewhere. Man... That's going under faves. Now that you've gotten that off your chest, do you think you can write a romantic story for Heero and Relena? Or anyone else of the Gundam guys?
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