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Reviewed By: Omega_Red9 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2005 17:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good for a start. I recommend looking a little bit further into the relationship between Robin and Raven. It doesn't have to be romantic or anything like that, but it just sort of drops that little nugget at the end and leaves the reader thinking whats next. I would reccomend a revision, perhaps even make it a couple of chapters instead of a one shot. One shots aren't very good at showing emotional development. The question you need to keep n mind is "where are you taking me?". There isn't enough resolution for me to be satisfied. Otherwise, the potential is great, and there is so much more that can be said. I look forward to reading more from you.
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Reviewed By: soul_stealer_25 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 18:17 CST
Comment/Review:
I like your story. It's good but you need to update.
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Reviewed By: gothic_raven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2005 21:31 CST
Comment/Review:
its good but you should update!! PLEASE update soon!! ^_^
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