| "Awakening" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: CarlaS. On: March 02, 2005 16:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OK, there ain't a lot of people in this world that can make me not vomit when writing about Goku and C... I can't even make myself say it. But, you did a wonderful, marvelous job and I loved every word. Remind me never to dare you to do anything...
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Title: Awakening
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 13:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great oneshot GB.. this is how i like to read goku and chichi.. because their own love story sucks in the series of DBZ...very well written..
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Reviewed By: Orchideater [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2005 02:20 CST
Comment/Review:
Wah! It was just a dream. ^^ I was wondering how Chichi could fly and hold her own against Vegeta. Wow, this was such a beautiful lemon it could convince people that G/CC is your favorite pairing! *eee-hee-hee* I liked the ocean metaphor, and Chichi's determination and willingness to die for Goku was touching. Loved the passages: "His energy broke over them in a nearly scalding wave, and she cried out, her body galvanizing below and around him, pulling him into her until they were one, a more perfect fusion than any other dance could devise. Her passion ignited his own" and "her eyes clenched closed, her even, white teeth clamped on her lower lip. Smiling, he tugged at that hostage lip with a gentle forefinger until she let it go, then leaned down to kiss it, feeling it stretch in a smile." Great images!
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Title: I
Reviewed By: Evanscentislazyandwontsignin On: February 22, 2005 22:50 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm with Barb, here. WHERE IN THE HFIL did you find the TIME to write this!? I'm jealous, to say the least. I loved the fight scene. Almost as much as the sex. Almost.
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Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2005 13:04 CST
Comment/Review:
*Blinks* When was the challenge thrown out?? Yesterday?? And you did THIS in that short space of time?? *Huffs* I just want to say I'm never speaking to you again... except to tell you that I'm copying and pasting this, changing the Gokus to Bardocks and The Chichis to Barbs... Oh and also to let you know how nice it is to see Goku being all sexy and... and... *loses all reasoning and purrs loudly*
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2005 09:35 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!!! You're so damn good! This was a totally fun ride and you made Chi fight and you made Vegeta in character and you made Goku so awesomely himself and damn, if this weren't such a great story and I hadn't challenged you to it, I'd be JEALOUS! :-p The writing is expert as always--how do you do these freakin things in one day???????? Even the ending--the plot-saver device worked so well and you put a true storyteller's twist on things!!! *applauds furiously*
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