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| "Love Long Forgotten (KakashixOC)" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Reviewed By: ange34 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2005 14:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
kool story man update soon
| Title: ...DOSHITE?!
Reviewed By: Hiroto [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2005 19:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...T-T...Please...write more...*sniffle* T-T I wanna read more 'bout Hatake 'n' Chiori~
| Title: Amanda
Reviewed By: Kyuubi_Sharingan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2005 11:36 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm gonna miss the once a day updates, although I understand why you're stopping them. I was wondering if you were going to go through the whol 8 years she was in the Snow Country, or if you were just going to go to skip over the absent years, and make stuff up along the way about what happened, when you need to. Just a thought. Anywho, I like Loki, he seems like the kind of guy you would want to have save you. Not that you would want to be in her situation or anything, but I think you know what I mean. Well, until the next update then!
| Reviewed By: ChristinaRR [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2005 19:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this so far. The age is a bit screwy with Kakashi, though, because he was around 14 when the kyuubi came, not 18. I'm not picky, though. I'm more into a good story than staying with the cannon story; and this definetly is a good story. Please continue! ^_^
| Title: Hiroto
Reviewed By: Hiroto [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2005 11:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THIS IS SOO AWESOME!!! Please update it soon!
| Title: Amanda
Reviewed By: Kyuubi_Sharingan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 19:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Trust me, you do not update too fast. Oooh, I agree, the peck on the cheek was very fitting, and cute. Poor Chiori though, I'm guessing that she won't be seeing Kakashi for a while, eh? I really don't see anything wrong with your grammar, but then again I spell things wrong all the time. Well, i can't wait until tomorrow, because you will be (hopefully) updating. Gee, I'm giddy already...
| Reviewed By: Lara Roberts [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 17:48 CST
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YEY, another update..*squeals* I liked this chapter, and her quick peck on Kakashi's masked cheek was cute. I didn't see that cliff hanger or falling off the cliff comming. That was a nice twist in the plot, especially how it related to her mother's suicide. Keep up the great writing and updating, man I wish more authors had the free time that you have, heck I wish I had more free time. Enjoy senioritis ^_^
| Reviewed By: Kyuubi_Sharingan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 00:22 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahh, if you keep updating like this, you will become my best friend. *sigh* They better get together, and Yumi has to get herself a life. Well, until the next chapter then!
| Reviewed By: Lara Roberts [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 20:28 CST
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I liked this chapter, and I was really surprised that you had already updated. Now, onto the more criticizing part of the review since you seemed to insist on it at the bottom of your chapter, and keep in mind that I do like your story, so don't think I'm trying to put it down. It seemes very Cinderella-ish with the wicked cousin and aunt thing going on, and might be interesting if you put an interesting twist on things such as making an arrangment to stay with Kakashi, run away, or have him come to her rescure early but have something happen with aunt or training. Just random ideas. I can tell you thought about her background and you have in some good details, and you describe Chiori, but you don't go into too much detail about her cousin aside from the fact that she is jealous of Chiori's beauty and has a stuck up personality. I thought the scene where Kakashi was taking care of her injury was really sweet, and I can't wait till you update again. Sorry for making you read through my randomness, feel free to disreguard everything I said, this is my first real review of a chapter for criticism because I have recently found out from my friend how much she likes just recieving input for her story. I hope it helps or at least makes you feel special that someone takes time to use up almost all the reviewing space. Keep up the great writing. I can't wait to see what happens next. P.S. feel free to check out my friend's fanfic, Dry Ice (also a naruto fic) hehehe
| Reviewed By: Lara Roberts [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 18:05 CST
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yey! I like your fic a lot ::nods head:: keep up the great writing
| Title: Kyuubi_Sharingan
Reviewed By: Kyuubi_Sharingan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 10:33 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sigh* I love Kakashi stories. 'Specially this one, or at least the way it's turning out so far. I can't wait until you update... OOh, what color is Chiori's hair?
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