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| "Tanabata Jasmine" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: BakaChuu~! On: May 10, 2005 13:58 EDT
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Hehe, I still think you did quite well with making Kenshin feverish - 'tis more realistic. >:3 I love the verbal banter in this chapter! I remember back when you sent me the stripped-down dialogue for it, and I still thought it was excellent even then. ^^ Very nicely executed, my dear Auntie Keej! I'm sorry it took me a while to catch up on meh TJ readings. ^^; I'm quite glad that I'm reading it through again, though! It's different reading it this time without as much of a wait and without beta-reading the chapter first! XD Anyway, excellent job on the chapter, and keep up the great work! *munches pocky* *skitters off to read the next chapter on a sugar high*
| Reviewed By: kitsmom [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 15:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying this! Your characturization is good, and interesting. Your plot moves along well, and I love the little touches of humor--Sano's worrying about splinters in the dinner, for example. And, best of all, for a professional proofreader, your spelling and grammar are wonderfully done! I found your story from a recommendation in an author's note, and I'm glad I did!
| Reviewed By: BakaChuu~! On: April 24, 2005 21:15 EDT
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ROFL!! Someone gave you pocky 'cuz you kept leaving pocky for me, eh? *cackles* Hehe... *munches pocky* I'll send you the strawberry kind, then! *sends strawberry pocky* It's meh favorite. :3 Anyway, about the chapter, I love how you characterized Aoshi. Very well done (even though that ice cube can be a royal PAIN to write)! Hehe, and Sano makes me crack up. Very nice job on the characters! Keep up the excellent work! :3
| Reviewed By: BakaChuu~! On: April 24, 2005 20:38 EDT
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Hehehe, YAY! I remember this chapter! XD I love how you put little plot bits into the story through Kenshin's stream of thought and conversations as well - very nicely done! :3 The action sequence is still as awesome as ever, and YAY for Aoshi! ^^ Oh, and you're quite welcome for the featured status - you deserve it! ^^ Anyway, I'm off to read the next chapter before my mind dies of blahness. (I fell ill last night... no fun at all... X_X)
| Reviewed By: Chibi Rouyakan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 16:22 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ya-taaaa!! ^^ Great job! I could go on and on about how good your story is, but there's not enough room for me to type it all! But I just wanted to say I love reading your fic!! It's so awesome!!!!! And I think YOU deserve pocky! *gives box of pocky* ^^ Keep up the amazing work!! (so many exclamation points! XD)
| Reviewed By: Shadow_Within [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 16:17 EDT
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Wow. O.o I found your story on the Featured Fanfics page and it is AWESOME!!!!!!!!! You create such a beautiful, realistic picture of what would happen if Kenshin was abducted. You describe all of the characters in a way that I have to wonder if you're Watsuki-sama incognito. You've made me love all the characters, even the ones I preveusly hated and you're OC's are so vivid and believeable. I can't wait for your next chapter!
| Reviewed By: BakaChuu~! On: April 17, 2005 03:43 EDT
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As much as I'm repeating myself on this, I love this chapter for this reason: your brilliant style really shines through here. I'm starting to pick up a lot of your distinctive writing characteristics, and I'm still in awe at how wonderfully you can tell a story. (And, of course, it only makes me that much happier that TJ got featured! :3) The conversation between Bayushi and Kenshin is very excellently written (and I can remember when you sent me just the dialogue, which was incredibly well done even at that stage). Keep up the amazing work! I'll always be in awe of your amazing writing skeelz! >:3 *munches pocky* ^^ Much love, Baka.
| Title: something other than BakaChuu this time! XD
Reviewed By: BakaBakaBaka On: April 16, 2005 17:00 EDT
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EE, ouchies for Kenshin. X3 I had to start snickering at Okina's line about Iwanbou (I'm like, heee, that shows what HE knows! XD [reference to Jinchuu... w00t!])... ANYway. Great chapter as always! Nice Japanese glossary - checked it over and found all to be well there! ^^ I'm still enjoying this muchly! Keep up the great work, and I shall chat with you later! >:3 (Finish teh chappeh before work starts, you hear?! XD) YAY for employment and featured status and dumping a man and getting a story done... all in a few days' work! XD LoL, don't mind me. I are crazy. :3 Can't wait for the next chapter! Fwee, now I'm off to do homework and get ready for the luau. Bwahahaha. *eats pocky* Take care~! *paf*
| Reviewed By: BakaChuu~! On: April 16, 2005 16:46 EDT
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As always, excellent chapter! Poor Kenshin - I'm just realizing that you were rather mean to him after all! XD (I guess I still had the ASW comparison in my mind when I first read this... LoL.) Anyway, sorry it took me a while to come back to review! *grimace* I got the e-mail for the brand new chappeh as well, so I'll go poke at it and toss up another review when I get there. :3 AND CONGRATULATIONS ON TJ'S FEATURED STATUS!! *happy dance* Bwahaha, I'm 2 for 2 now! >:3 *munches pocky with a devilish look* Whee~ Now I'm off to go read the next chapter. Until then! ~Baka(Bokken/Chuu/etc.)
| Reviewed By: Reverse Paradigm 2 On: April 15, 2005 23:32 EDT
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This story is great. Could you provide translations for the Japanese you use? I know some of it, but it's still confusing when I have to guess what it means. And congrats on making it onto the featured fanfic list here at MM.
| Reviewed By: Bakachuuuu~! (Why do I feel like a Pokemon typing that? XD) On: April 11, 2005 06:07 EDT
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Wheeeee~ *happy dance* *sings off-key* Who loves the action? Baka loves the action, if anyone hates the action, then Baka kills that faction ... -___- I need sleep, can you tell? Anyway, the action this chapter is just awesome. I still bow to your almighty writing skeelz on this one - very nicely done! :D And of course people are reading it here! I ARE ALL TEH READERS YOU NEED. XD Man, I really need to lay off the caffeine at night. ^^; Hehe, I liked the image of Kenshin leaping from "the pointy thing at the front of a ship" (XD) - reminded me of a flying squirrel... with red hair... Oh dear, please cage me or SOMEthing. T__T YOU SPIKED THE POCKY! I KNOW YOU DID! ... *becomes civilized* Anyway, I'm quite glad I opted to read this again, as it's really helping me pick out a few things you might need to work on. >:3 Not that it's anything big, mind you (as the story rawks), but a few small things at least. We'll work on them in the rewrite. ^^ *eats spiked pocky anyway* Keep 'em coming! You're slowly (but surely) getting them all up! ^^ *glomps teh Keej*
| Title: SQUEE
Reviewed By: smalfoy [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2005 15:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, what a wonderful story, and you have the characters perfect! Kaoru seems like Kaoru, and Kenshin acts just like he would in the series. I love it, this is probably one of the best Kenshin stories I have ever had the pleasure of reading, and I really hope you update soon. Please please please keep writing it!
| Reviewed By: DerBaka On: April 08, 2005 05:35 EDT
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*eyes pocky warily* Hm... To eat or not to eat... XD At any rate, this was yet another excellent chapter! I might have caught a teensy mistake, but I'll have to go back and look at it before I decide if it's a mistake or not. XD (It's 2:30am, can't expect TOO much outta me at this hour, y'know? XD) EEE, Yoshida needs to get pounded. Badly. Can't wait until you finally get that out of the way in the last chapter (hehe, jumping ahead now, yes I am). XD At any rate, can't wait for more chapters! AND YAY someone else besides me reviewed too! *dances* ... *shifty eyes* Teh Authir Keej ish teh awesome... ... :3 *eats pocky anyway* XD
| Reviewed By: Lynn10 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2005 19:08 EDT
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Hey, I think I remember you; you're on fanfiction.net! I've seen you around before, but never had the chance to read that 27-chaptered story! Well, it's finally nice to meet you. You're on so many people's favorite's lists, and now I know why. I think I'll skip ahead a bit and keep reading on the other website because this is such a good story. Excellent story so far! ~*Lynn*~
| Reviewed By: BakaChuuuu~ On: April 06, 2005 17:42 EDT
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*eats the pocky with a smile* Traps, eh? What might you be trying to trap me into doing? >:3 Anyway, YAY! Kenshin's back in the story! XD Ouches. Lotsa ouches. Actually, this is one of my favorite chapters (I'm saying that a lot, aren't I? XD) style-wise. I really like how the first section flows - the reader really gets a sense of confusion, but rather than getting lost by it, it's more of a guided confusion. (If that makes any sense. XD) Hehe, I will continue to bow to your awesome writing skeelz! *bows* ... *grovels* XD Keep up the excellent work, and I'll keep dropping reviews! ^^ (You deserve it muchly, m'dear! *glomps Keej*)
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