| Reviewed By: Tenrousei [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2005 01:16 CST
I think you should brak the story up into paragraphs. It's very tiresome to read all those never-ending paragraphs. The story pretty well written but it was painfull on the eyes. But because of all the 'npcs' or something and the way the italics coasted in and out of each line made it all rather confusing.