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| "Flower Petals" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: FFarg Review
Reviewed By: ClownyMelonBalls [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2005 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really have to agree with Panasonic Princess for the most part. The metaphors are very nice and eloquent, but there are too many of them. The one big problem (and I don't know if you would call it big) was the transition from hearing his thoughts to seeing his actions. It was a little hard to tell that you were still talking about the same person and not someone else that you had not introduced. Over all it was a very enjoyable read and I too look forward to see more stories. Good Job.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: The Panasonic Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 08:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a sweet read. I enjoyed the transition from Bakura talking about Ryou's book of quotes to his death. The metaphors were nicely written, but you could have calmed down with them. After the first two, I got the point: they completed each other. I noticed a few mistakes, but it looked as though they were made simply because you were typing too fast. It's a mistake we all make, even me. Just slow down when you type, and double-check it. Other than those two things, I really like this. You've taken an often over-used plot and made it your own. I look forward to seeing more from you! ~Pana
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2005 11:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
*snif* nooooooooo not my muses, I loved it, so beautifully written
| Reviewed By: Lily Fairy (not logged in) On: March 25, 2005 07:38 CST
Comment/Review:
Awwwww...it's so cute! All fluffy-ish. Just kidding! It's great!
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