| "Admiration" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Catbeasta On: May 11, 2005 08:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like the idea but you should have taken more time to develop the characters. Yes, they are pretty much developed, being on tv and all, but you just rushed everything way to fast. If the reader can't connect with the character then what is the point? You did a good job portraying them but there needs to be a lot more detail and a lot less hurrying. You missed out on the friction that those two have between each other. It would have been a lot better for there to have been anger giving way slowly to love. Both a pretty pigheaded, it might have made for an interesting story.
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Reviewed By: Bahamian Royalty On: May 08, 2005 20:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was fun to read. i really want to read more
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Reviewed By: Cherryvine13 On: May 07, 2005 16:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hi! I read this story on fanfiction.net I like the pairing, actually I love it, but that's besides the point. I only said that so the last reviewer wouldn't make you feel bad! okay well- I think that they went very fast. I mean, they kiss and then Sokka goes to live with him?
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Reviewed By: sweetums On: April 17, 2005 00:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah, sorry, but the gay relationship sorta freeked me out. But other wise, It was good....
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