| "Yesterday's Feelings" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Reviewed By: GarnetKoryu [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 18:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! how's it going? I'm your newest fan! Aww that make me feel special! YOur story is very creative and origional, I really enjoy reading it. Sometimes I have difficulty reading it though...auto-spell check is not always the answer. I am interested in discovering what more of the words that you have Ryo use mean. I know a bit of Japanises already but not everything...Could you please make a note or something at the end of a chapter discussing the words and their meanings? I'ld appreciate it and I'm sure others would too. Anyways I love your ficcy and I hope you post more chapters soon.
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Title: Kudos
Reviewed By: Irish [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 13:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You get an official Kudos Cookie from me. I'm pretty impressed. In general I don't read much fanfiction, because 90% of its pretty crappy. I actually enjoyed yours rather a lot towards the last couple chapters. You start out a little slow, the writing is a bti stilited, and I am very curious about how you came to the conclusion a minor head injury like a minor concussion would even knock Dee unconsious for any length of time, let alone give him amnesia. Maybe you know something about medicine I don't, I'm certainly not a doctor, but I did very much struggle with how you introduced the amnesia That aside, there were several moments where I actually laughed out loud. I like that you don't have Ryo crying, throwing fits, or being overly dramatic. You actually have him acting like a man, I really appreciate that. I think you do a decent Dee too. I really like that you too have seen Dee's past as a good way to introduce some drama, too few people take advantage of that, or if they do, it becomes a huge sob story. I'm very much enjoying their little intimate moments as well. Another small criticism is that there are times when you have obviously spell checked too fast and ended up with a word similar to the word you mean in spelling but not at all the word you mean (like retreive I think, instead of revery). Take the time to do it right, your story is worth it. I think I am actually even going to add you to my fav. list. Kudos on onw of the best fics I've read in a while.
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Title: Kudos
Reviewed By: Irish [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 13:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You get an official Kudos Cookie from me. I'm pretty impressed. In general I don't read much fanfiction, because 90% of its pretty crappy. I actually enjoyed yours rather a lot towards the last couple chapters. You start out a little slow, the writing is a bti stilited, and I am very curious about how you came to the conclusion a minor head injury like a minor concussion would even knock Dee unconsious for any length of time, let alone give him amnesia. Maybe you know something about medicine I don't, I'm certainly not a doctor, but I did very much struggle with how you introduced the amnesia That aside, there were several moments where I actually laughed out loud. I like that you don't have Ryo crying, throwing fits, or being overly dramatic. You actually have him acting like a man, I really appreciate that. I think you do a decent Dee too. I really like that you too have seen Dee's past as a good way to introduce some drama, too few people take advantage of that, or if they do, it becomes a huge sob story. I'm very much enjoying their little intimate moments as well. Another small criticism is that there are times when you have obviously spell checked too fast and ended up with a word similar to the word you mean in spelling but not at all the word you mean (like retreive I think, instead of revery). Take the time to do it right, your story is worth it. I think I am actually even going to add you to my fav. list. Kudos on onw of the best fics I've read in a while.
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Reviewed By: lady_kail On: August 31, 2005 04:45 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've just read all 5 chapters you've written so far, and all I can say is that to story is heartrendingly sweet. I hope you update often and quickly, because I just can't bare to see Dee and Ryo so hurt and unsure and not quite together. PS I really, REALLY love your story!
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Reviewed By: caseygomu On: August 18, 2005 04:58 CDT
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Thanks for the new chapter... please keep going!! I like that you're adding more to Dee's memories, it makes the whole thing more than just another amnesia fic. I like your pacing too, well-written!
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Reviewed By: Takara On: August 11, 2005 00:58 CDT
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Oooooo! Update please! I've just started reading this, and I'm already hooked. Its interesting how you portrayed Dee without his memories, especially the fact that he seems to be the exact opposite of what he's normally like.
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Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: dragonstar1949@yahoo.com On: August 06, 2005 03:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was a bit worried when I noticed the date of chapter 4. I just finished reading up to 4 the other day and wanted more. Glad to see another chapter up. Keep up the great work. I'm new to FAKE, and can't get enough of Dee and Ryo. I'm glad to find so many talented authors putting out quality fic. And you are among them. The only problem I found with the story is how Manhattan is described.
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Reviewed By: gddsinferno On: August 05, 2005 16:24 CDT
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I am glad to see that you have updated. Truthfully I was getting worried that you were just going to drop this story. I am glad to see that you are adding a little bit of a twist with Dees memories. Looking forward to the next chapter keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: paraluman* On: August 04, 2005 18:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I JUST HAVE TO KNOW!... PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
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Title: Awsome!!
Reviewed By: Fallen_Angel_Of_Darkness On: July 13, 2005 04:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*whimpers* It's over!!! For now anyways... I absolutly LOVE this fic and I adore you for writting, you have an amazinf talent... thank you for spending your time writting this down for others to read... I have to go, drop me an email sometime... inuyasha_1234@hotmail.com... Ja ne
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Title: Mauztattoo
Reviewed By: Mauztattoo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 21:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so glad to see you updated. The bit with Dee having bad reactions to drugs is a nice touch -is it physical or psychological (Arnon and Jess both died because of drugs, if indirectly)? I'll be waiting to see what happens next.
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Title: firgodes7@yahoo.com
Reviewed By: gddsinferno On: May 04, 2005 11:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. I really liked the way you played off Dee and Ryo thoughout this chapter. I also like the way that you had Ryo helping dee with his memory. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
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Title: firgodes7@yahoo.com
Reviewed By: gddsinferno On: April 13, 2005 16:33 CDT
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I enjoyed your story. Exspecially the detailed description of the drugs in the story. It really helped out a lot. I cant wait to see you write another chapter soon. Keep up the good work.
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