Title: Constructive criticism
Reviewed By: Yamifanner [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 21:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the story so far, but there are some errors that I've noticed. The names were not capitalized. The character's name should always be capitalized. There were no quotation marks in the first chapter. Always put quotation marks when the characters are speaking, otherwise, the readers will get too confused. I know you spelled "okanomiake" wrong. This is how you spell it:okonomiyaki. You did a good job on this story and try to fix your errors, 'kay? please continue this story!!
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