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| "Suffer" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Sihde (Sisi) On: July 18, 2005 01:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
First off, I like so much the idea of having a chapter dealing with revenge. Good on you. Your grammar is very good but there's little explanation for someone who is not quite familiar with the series. In the last paragraph the sentence "Is all this pain you're experiencing going to help you think twice about tearing another loved one away from me?" Could be changed to "Does all this pain you experience make you regret tearing a loved ones away from me?" All in all this is very good, more description perhaps on what was taken from the narrator or each person's crime?
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Dumas1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2005 14:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
Very nice look at Dais's feelings, though I'm not sure that the Warlords were really all that close. Then again, it has been almost ten years (or maybe even more) since the series aired in the States. Very well-written piece overall, gets into his head or heart.
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