|
| "Everyone's A Winner!" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 29, 2005 10:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm trying to get caught up in my readings. This was a great chapter. I love watching the evolution of Piccolo. He had already changed so much with his experience with Gohan and now to see him even further evolve with Khri is so touching. Though he needs to learn more about women and what is considered acceptable behavior (like studying a woman's form, though it was innocent observation on his part it's not necessarily acceptable to a woman). I have to ask, was Khri checking Piccolo's ass? The women were talking like she was (but with him wearing jeans it may be a sight to see). It was great to see Khri cheer up a bit too...sometimes a good distraction is all we need. I didn't see any errors so all I can say is keep up the good work and I'll try to read the rest of Errant Exile as soon as I can.
| Title: A real treat.
Reviewed By: bura400 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 16:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have you seen you in the forums Kieri; your art was unique and very beautiful (I especially love the meticulous details in the hair) I have always been a Piccolo fan and your fanfiction sounded original...different from what I usually read. I have only ever read one Piccolo/OC that I have liked and now I have found another. I know debbiechan did, but your characterization skills are as they say, "right on the money". Every character was painstakingly, strictly "in character". It was an enjoyable read and I look forward to reading more of your fanfiction or fanart, in the near future. New fan- Bura400
| Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 20:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Awwww, immensely enjoyable! I was going to skip ahead in EE to catch this one on ff.net but so glad you posted here! (I'm here a lot) Can't tell you what a relief it is to read a solid narrative with so many spot-on details and no unnecessary dialogue. I excuse so much sloppiness in fanfic when I'm taken with a story but only realize HOW much when I read a crystal clean one. This piece captures so much of the spirit of the anime, and each glimpse of the characters rings true. I'm a huge nitpicker when it comes to characterizations of Bulma--I see so many bad ones in romance ff. I loved her bossy sassy self here, and Piccolo's reactions to her and other women had me giggling. Hope this piece wins you some readers for EE--you're damn good. Oh--and I live for playful sci fi details like the thermal polka dots on the lightweight fabric. Just damn fun stuff.
|
|
|
