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| "The Forgotten" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2005 12:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting your fic to the FFARG! I want to say that your action sequencing is nicely done. While the main point of issue I saw was in the lack of grammatical punctuation (quotation marks, etc) your story has a strong feel for the most part, and with the help of a reliable beta, I think you could really improve upon this piece. Because of some of the grammar issues, certain parts were harder to understand, but did get your meaning, and I think that in rough form, you've done well. You show a solid basis for storytelling, and I think that if you can master the grammar, you'll be on your way! Thanks again for your FFARG submission. I wish you luck in future chapters, and with your writing endeavors! ~Sueric
| Reviewed By: LaLa13 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2005 17:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, pretty good story so far, but you really need to put quotation marks before and after the characters say something. It gets kind of confusing with no quotation marks. Great job though! Very original.
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