| "Queen" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
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Reviewed By: Zjen On: June 16, 2009 14:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
EPIC FAIL!!!!!!! Your story line is ok but your style of writing is horrible! I found my self skipping sections, hoping it would get better. I couldn't even bring myself to finish reading it. It would do you good to add actual emotion to the characters. Try to think logically, like kagome could have been more upset about leaving and finding out that she's adopted. You also left loop wholes like the fact that she's a miko? How can she be that and a full demon??? Anyways just try and keep the charecters as them selves, tone down the ooc ness! Perhaps if you revise the chapters a bit, this story has the potential to be one of the higher ranking fics.
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Reviewed By: l3abyChick [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 13:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue updating this!!!! this is probably one of the best YYH/IY stories ive ever read!!!! im begginggg please continue updating
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Title: keep going
Reviewed By: kags1 On: February 04, 2006 14:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Im having a freakin ceasure(sp?) attack. Please hurry up and update Damnit.
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Reviewed By: yuni On: August 18, 2005 22:59 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Im having a freakin ceasure(sp?) attack. Please hurry up and update.
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Title: ^.^
Reviewed By: Eternal Kenmei J.M. On: July 16, 2005 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update damnit!!!!
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Reviewed By: Inu Fan05 On: July 16, 2005 15:47 CDT
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YOU EVIL PERSON! HOW DARE YOU LEAVE A CLIFFIE LIKE THAT! THAT IS JUST SOOO UNFAIR! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: KharmaGurl On: July 16, 2005 00:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Authors and their bloody cliffies! Grrrrr....Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Karma321 On: July 15, 2005 16:57 CDT
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I agree with bloodbunny, if you want us all to understand the story without making us bored, try drawing the characters and objects you wish to descibe. Also, I find it hard to keep up with the family and what the relationships are. Maybe a Family Tree would help? Just suggestions. Your Story is an awesome one!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Karma321 On: July 15, 2005 16:51 CDT
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All right: This is an awesome story, but it got boring at parts for me. This is for the sole reason that you put everything in too much detail. I understand you want the reader to see the object or character as you see them, but try to be brief. Not many people have enought patience or time to read through everything. Otherwise, I want you to keep up the good work. You are a wonderful author and have great talent.
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Reviewed By: Inu Fan05 On: July 08, 2005 17:37 CDT
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loved it! authors and their cliffies. *humph!* anyway, another great two chapters. you are gifted. keep up the great work.
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Reviewed By: darknightangel On: July 08, 2005 13:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow,just wow! this is an AWESOME STORY!!! please update soon!
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Title: meh...
Reviewed By: EGO_FREAK On: July 05, 2005 23:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story MAKE THE DESCRIPTIONS SHORTER IF YOU HAVE TO WRITE THEM!!! it takes away from the story because when i read it i have to scrol through 12424 lines of description.. not cool. but it is a great story tho keep writing its great did i mention cool...
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Reviewed By: InuFan05 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2005 15:39 CDT
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i love it! i didn't want to review until i finished reading it, so i'm reviewing it now. i completely loved it. i noticed that a lot of people like the hiei/kagome pairing. i am you of those people, i like the whole "love triangle" thing going on between kagome, hiei, and joey. do you think you could start calling joey j "junior"? after all, isn't his middle name junior? just a suggestion that might make things easier. keep up the great work. i am totally looking foward to the next chapter. please update soon. till next chapter, bye!
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Reviewed By: bloodbunny [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2005 13:15 CDT
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I loved this chapter! You don't even have to ask about how happy I am to have this be a hiei/kagome fic! Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: bloodbunny [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 14:10 CDT
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Yeah! Great two chapters! But, I think I'm going to have alittle trouble remembering who people are. Make pictures!
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