Reviewed By: deafening silence [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2005 20:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
ok, you said to tell you if i was confused? Well i'm pretty confused here. As i understand it, Greg just got accepted into a college (a good one?) but for some reason, he's really not happy about it. Does he suffer from depression, or some other kind of mental illness? It seems like it, but i'm not sure. Ok. This lily character-is she really a ghost haunting an asylum, or is she having hallucinations from medication given to her? That kinda threw me. Could you maybe try to clear this up for me? Or maybe things will be easier to understand after i read the next chapter. Anyway, congratulations! You've suceeded in writing the first non-anime fanfiction i've ever read! I really have nothing to compare this to, so there's very little you will be able to mess up in my eyes. Just..please...don't slack of on the mechanical stuff. That's my one huge pet peeve, in case you hadn't already noticed that. Well, get that next chapter up soon! I want to see how this is going to turn out!
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