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| "Miko's Mischief" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2009 05:36 CST
Comment/Review:
this sounds good so far, i hope to read more soon
| Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2008 13:49 CDT
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poor little koenma, this is good please update it
| Reviewed By: dejaz On: February 25, 2007 16:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WRITE MORE!WRITE MORE!WRITE MORE!!PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!!I ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT SO FAR!PLEASE UP DATE SOON!!
| Reviewed By: hiei_soulmates_kagome_7880 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2006 03:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There are quite a few spelling errors in this piece. If nothing else, when you insert Japanese words into the text, please use the standard English spelling. For example, "ningen" as opposed to "nigen" Also, I would recommend working on your paragraph formatting more- leaving a line empty between paragraphs, etc. It will be easier to read that way. As well, I would remind you that "It is better to show than say." Show emotions, etc., but do so by describing their actions, movements, etc. Finally, ask yourself what will make your fic unique among the many IY/YYH crossovers. Use descriptive sentences and try to think of unique plot devices, or at least ones not so well used. Your story has potential, but you need to brush it up. ^-^ ^_^
| Reviewed By: Animeotakubara [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2006 15:44 CST
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Please update soon
| Reviewed By: rainshower16 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2005 09:43 CDT
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i agree with z jitsu on the errors, but i think that this story will be very good once you get into it a little more.
| Reviewed By: Z Jitsu [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 21:58 CDT
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There are quite a few spelling errors in this piece. If nothing else, when you insert Japanese words into the text, please use the standard English spelling. For example, "ningen" as opposed to "nigen" Also, I would recommend working on your paragraph formatting more- leaving a line empty between paragraphs, etc. It will be easier to read that way. As well, I would remind you that "It is better to show than say." Show emotions, etc., but do so by describing their actions, movements, etc. Finally, ask yourself what will make your fic unique among the many IY/YYH crossovers. Use descriptive sentences and try to think of unique plot devices, or at least ones not so well used. Your story has potential, but you need to brush it up.
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