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| "A Very InuYasha Christmas" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: GuardianOfTheShikon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2005 00:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWWWW! THE FLUFFYNESS!! I LOVE IT!!
| Title: god's hitman
Reviewed By: angel halo On: September 07, 2005 22:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that wwas such a cool story The writting was ok. Yet you need to put more soul and emotion inot your story. you know like adjectives and such. Yet overall it was very good. You also seem to rush to the point! you need to slow down and portray the character's emotions and feelings towards the other character. this will then help for further stories and your writting skills. Also with the christmas idea, it has been used so often it is not funny yet you did use some very original ideas. with her cutting her hand, dogs lick so if inuyasha did that that would of been brilliant yet when she worries that if he knows how to kiss, then have him surprise her. Also when they did kiss. I reda for 2 seconds and it was over! EXPAND ON HOW FINALLY THEY WERE TOGETHER AND LOOKING INTO THEIR EYES. THAT MUSHY STUFF THAT EVERYONE "AW"'S AT! With Sango and miroku, you should of had them paired cause everyone knows at episode 143 or whatever sangop agrees to bear his children and they get married. This would be so cute yet don't include that lazy no good kitzu and Koga. You shuold of had him act like a jackass and Kagome kick his buttt! GIRL POWER!!!!!!! overall it was a very entertaining story and i reeeaaallly enjoyed it. kep on writing
| Reviewed By: thyme_cat [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 16:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
hm, I wonder what a Shinto Shrine would look like in christmas decorations? simple stories are nice sometimes, and it is good, but you've written better. Keep up the good work ^_^
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