Reviewed By: Lady Macbeth [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2001 22:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is certainly a unique crossover! The idea of a Star Wars/Gundam Wing crossover initially startled me, but when I thought about it, it wasn't that hard to swallow - which is a great thing to have in crossover fics. ^_^
The style of writing is fast-paced, and it nearly keeps with the pace of the series Gundam Wing, so it was easy to get a mental picture going. However, there were some point when it was almost TOO fast, as if it were rushed or skipped across. Also, the little decorated divider things ( ~*~*~*~*~ ) made painful breaks in the text, because they almost seemed too "flowery" for an angst piece. O_o Weird how I notice things like that...
There were a number of spelling, grammar and word usage errors that made this a somewhat difficult read. They each cause a slight hesitation in the mental recitation of the fic, and with a number of them it gives a sense of a "jumpy tape" or a "scratched record" (the best analogies I could think of to explain it).
Very little is lacking in the Originality/Creativity department - I'd have never pictured a Star Wars/Gundam Wing crossover before I read this fic. However, at some points the OOCness of the characters and shift away from the setting was a bit too much for me, even though you said in the heading that you weren't real familiar with the Gundam Wing series and that Heero and Luke were OOC.
The story itself is very enjoyable. The only downside was the "jumpiness" of it and the aforementioned errors caused it to be a bit difficult to read in one continuous shot, which lowered the enjoyability of the experience a bit.
I think this fic has a lot of potential to be great. It's definitely above average for story and idea, it just needs fine-tuning in structure and details. |
