| "When Subs Divide" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: rushie [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2010 23:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story was just blah...boring and lack of description. When you are writing in the future, try to show the reader whose point of view of the story. Is your story first person or third person.You should do more description in terms of your setting for the different characters. I felt like you talking to someone about the story rather than writing it. One more thing, please read over before you post.
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Title: When Subs Divide
Reviewed By: JMavatar7211 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2007 17:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Katara. Don't u just hate it when a guy fights over a girl like that? It happened to me in first grade): Five guys; Grant,Andrew,William, Tommy, and Tom(and they were ugly!). If only it could've been Christopher but he left in 3rd grade! God Darnet on u Christopher!(i don't like using *amn-it when i put God in front of it. it seems disrespectful)great stry!!!!
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Title: U RULE
Reviewed By: AWESOME On: August 17, 2005 23:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THEE Best fanfic I have ever read. PLZ make a sequel! I luv it, luv it luv it luv it. You have some real talent/skill. I swear, amazing story. I've read it like...3 times now. WRITE MORE. IF U DON'T I'LL...ummm.....er....sick my rhino on u! PLEASE make a sequel (actually i heard ur going to) roCK ON MY AMAZING FANFIC WRITER FRIEND WHO I VISIT IN MY DREAMS! ~Ur totally obsessed fan I luv u
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Reviewed By: tmw On: July 09, 2005 16:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! I liked how you like captured the charaters. Like you knew each of their personalities. Teh first ending was better. IT was more heart warming than the second one. But the second one was good too. But if you were to publish this into a book (I would most definitally buy) I would choose the first ending. Good Job!
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Title: I hate Toucan Sam
Reviewed By: FRUITY-LICIOUS On: June 15, 2005 15:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
FINALLY! Sum1 out of the 700+ people who've read this story actually gave feedback! I've been waiting forever! I mean, Iras Ishtar wrote to me but i think it's only because i wrote sumthing for his. They were faking it, it was the alternate ending, it doesn't fit with the other ending, it can get confusing! Thanks for feedbacking...if that's a word...ummm and thanks i would write more if i didn't run out of ideas...which i did...so i need a new idea and once i get it it'll be up here in a second. (Since so many ppl read this everyday, you can check out my other fics that 4 sum reason don't show up on my screen maybe they do on urs tho...) ~Fruit Loops
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Title: wait...
Reviewed By: Kiche Minamoto On: June 14, 2005 22:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wait, so they were faking it? I'M SOOOO CONFUSED!!!!! You should keep writing fafics! You're really great!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Author of this story thing...aka Fruit Loops On: May 31, 2005 14:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey! Thanks for writing a review to my story! FINALLY! So ur the guy who wrote Catch22? That was great by the way but i think i said that already...anyway, LOL fivesome, is is definitely going to be in the dictionary. Dude, my spam filter code is RPFE...that's just weird...lol sry i had to do that ~Fruit Loops
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Reviewed By: Iras Ishtar On: May 30, 2005 23:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cute. All of them like her, if I were her I would have taken advantage of that... fivesome... is that a word? no. well it is now... AangKatara is definetly the best though Thanks for reviewing my story by the way! Dude, my Span Filter code is BDSM... that is just weird...
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