| "Sweet Release" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] |
Reviewed By: crimson_blade07 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2005 20:21 CST
Comment/Review:
i thought it was good for being one of the first ones that you have written, and i think that you should continue because that is the only way to inprove. on the next one that you write however, try to elaborate more. go in to more detail about what they think and felt and what he did to her.
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Reviewed By: Simply a Lady (NSI) On: June 01, 2005 02:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
I admit it was interesting... A nice concept to... But it was short... And if I seem rude I truly sincerely do not mean to be, but it also seemed quick. A little to quick to be honest... I would try again and also put in some more detail and foreplay action and then make the actual joining longer a little bit. That and you might want to check your computer. It looks like one huge block of words. Most people find that kind of hard to read...Anyhow I hope this helps
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