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| "The Disasters Brought By Free Time and Neglect" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Drof Tceferp (Grr, it logged me out) On: June 10, 2005 22:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
^^ Y'know what annoys me? When people use icky chat-speak in their reviews. You should treat reviews like a mini-fic. I'm probably just being picky, but I HATE seeing 'Hey, it's rlly good!! U update soon, ok? Or else!! & it was SOOO funny!! I mean, lol!!'. That's HIDEOUS. Anyway. ^^ This is REALLY cool. It's AWESOME. Just a suggestion, though: Paragraph breaks. If you double-space the paragraphs when you first write them, it makes it easier to read. Anyway, this is AWESOME. I mean, really, it's just really cool!!! You managed to make it really deep, and at the same time, really funny. It's totally Shuichi, but...deep and thoughtful. And still Shuichi. Yeah. ^^ And Tohma rocks.
| Reviewed By: Reiky On: June 08, 2005 12:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved your fic! It was so impressive, so deep and intense. I was on the edge of my seet all the time. Just fascinating. I felt like I was there, like I understood your Suichi completely... I really liked it. My favourite scenes are when Tohma beats Shu, and I like that Shu says everything on his mind, I like when Eiri gets drunk, and I like suicide scene. But I think there could be some regret - Yuki should regret, that he didn't get Shu down at first, he was kind of playing with his life. But Eiri can be interpreted differentely. And I loved that Shu tried to be strong - and he did! I think he did - he wasn't like Tohma, but anyway...And I like that at the end Shu sees his own mistakes. Your fic made my cry a little bit...Thanks!
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