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| "finding Chindi" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: NERVSGC [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2007 01:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Keep goin with this story. Update soon.
| Title: Guess "WHO???"
Reviewed By: blake02 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 03:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi there Best fwend!!!long time no see... actually i kinda hacked blake's account... just kidding... yah know i don't have any accounts here at MM.org... hey did yah know that you can also write Filipino fanfics on FF.net... BTW, i proud of you 'coz at least you can write a fanfic with least grammatical error not... ahemmm!!! just... forget it!!! or else Blake will kill me! but your ficciee is really cute and great, why didn't you post the 2nd 3rd one... i know you already posted it on FF.net??? well, maybe your just too busy with your studies... but for the chappiee3, i think keeping chindi is not a good decision... BTW again! what is your idea bout the ending... just email me aight???... goodluck to your career and Godbless...n_n
| Title: Keep Writting!!
Reviewed By: Reapper [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2005 17:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an excellent story. I really don't think that you are giving yourself enough credit. This story seams to show an insite that I would expect from someone much older that 13. What impressed me the most is the interplay and development of Asuka, Hikari, and Touji. You seam to have a good understanding of the complexities of their relationships and how they view them, right down to Asuka denial of her feelings for Shinji. The only thing that was really out of character was the behavor of Misato and Ritsuko. Despite the fact that in their free time they act like a bunch of drunk, horny, recless frat boys, when the situation is serious, like when one of the pilots are in danger or missing, Misato and Ritsuko are probably the most calm, cool, and focused individuals in the story. In the origional story, you mostly see Ritsuko in a work situation, and therefore only serious and collected. Your Spelling and grammer were not bad at all, The errors I did notice were easy to figure out contetually and hardly an anoyance. I have seen much more glaring errors from native speakers. I found this story very enjoyalble and refreshingly lite harted. It had a nice mix of comedy and drama. I am looking forward to the next chapter. I can't wait for Asuka reaction when she relizes that she bathed with Shinji. Please keep writting this story.
| Reviewed By: Kargan303 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 16:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found this fic to be most enjoyable. I love the way you brought out the motherly side of Asuka. Kepp up the good work I look forwards to reading more of this fic.
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