| "Breaking the Habit" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
Reviewed By: ladydeath31178 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2007 21:30 CDT
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nicely done , I'm looking forward to your next update
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Reviewed By: AnimePrincessInuLover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2007 01:08 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You'r Fic ROCKS! I think it's totally awesome you are doing such a great job writing this. PLEASE UPDATE SOON! can't wait to see what happens. what suspens! Loved it! you Rock!!!
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Reviewed By: kyorocks On: June 17, 2007 15:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update SOON!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: rav3n On: July 24, 2005 15:40 CDT
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plz update, really wanna see what happens in the story!!
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Reviewed By: xxxamy_leexxx (Not logged in) On: July 08, 2005 21:20 CDT
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i love this story, i just hope ur not one of those writers who drop of the face of the planet with ppl here waiting for you to update, plz update asap!! *blessed be*
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Reviewed By: xxxamy_leexxx (Not logged in) On: July 08, 2005 21:20 CDT
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i love this story, i just hope ur not one of those writers who drop of the face of the planet with ppl here waiting for you to update, plz update asap!! *blessed be*
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Title: ffarg review
Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 14:26 CDT
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First, I want to thank you for submitting your piece to the ffarg. You have an interesting piece here; a compelling AU plot is developing and quite nicely. Your characterizations are recognizable and fit well within the bounds created by Takahashi, even though you've put them in such a different situation (though somehow this seems perfect for Miroku...). I would strongly suggest you find a beta reader with a really solid grap on grammar and is a spelling fanatic. You have some spelling errors, yes, but more often you substitute a word that sounds correct but means something else entirely from what you want. Also, you might want to look at the way you break up your paragraphs when there is dialogue involved. The beta board on the forums has many helpful, friendly people itching to catch things like that. You have a solid story started and it'll be interesting to see where you go with it. Thanks again for sharing!
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Reviewed By: Night_Miko (NOT LOGGED IN) On: June 27, 2005 13:59 CDT
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Nicely done. Update soon.
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Reviewed By: Chris A. On: June 26, 2005 20:17 CDT
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doing good! update soon, this story is really interesting.
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Reviewed By: xxxamy_leexxx [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 23:57 CDT
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great story so far, lookin foward to the next chapter!! lol, post asap!! *blessed be*
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova(you should be used to =my lazyness by now o0) On: June 25, 2005 20:58 CDT
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poor kagome...i have a question..do you actually hate kouga or did he just make a good big bad wolf(sorry i had to put that in there) so to speak?? just wanderin. update soon, as long as you update i will review. ja ne, Zirra
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Title: Breaking the Habit
Reviewed By: Dilanda Albata [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 16:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This felt a bit rushed once, but it's going great so far^^. It also seems you update this story often, which is always a good thing.
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 22:38 CDT
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great chap...oh man is inu grouchy when he's tired...update soon, ja ne, Zirra
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Title: FFRG review (prologue)
Reviewed By: BakaBokken [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 11:23 CDT
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Thank you for submitting your story to the FFRG. First off, I think you have a pretty interesting AU in the making with this story. My main critique, however, has to do with style and grammar/spelling. I noticed a large number of grammatical and spelling errors - many of these can easily be fixed with a good beta reader. (You can always find one in the Beta/Pre-Reading and Writing Help section at the forum.) Your earlier descriptions are far better than your later ones as well; the later descriptions are more sloppy, abrupt, and somewhat confusing. A decent beta reader should also be able to help you in this regard. The style is a bit choppy and doesn't flow entirely well, and the dialogue seems a bit forced at times. Work on polishing, adding to your descriptions, and giving your story some flow - you have a fun premise to work with, so with some refining and editing, this could be a very good read. Keep writing, and best of luck with future chapters. Thanks again for submitting this to the FFRG.
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Reviewed By: Night_Miko ( not logged in) On: June 20, 2005 12:07 CDT
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It seems that I am the only one who is reading this story but don't give up because in time others will read and they will want to know more just like me. I really love that chapter and I hope that there is more in the near future. Oh one question: Who is the person who hired Inuyasha? Keep writing and I'll keep reading and reviewing.
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Reviewed By: Night_Miko (not logged in) On: June 11, 2005 22:10 CDT
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I am impress that this is going to be a good story just by that chapter alone. Keep writing and I'll keep reading and reviewing.
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Reviewed By: Night_Miko (not logged in) On: June 09, 2005 22:12 CDT
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Keep it up. I want to read more.
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova(not logged in....duh) On: June 07, 2005 22:04 CDT
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it was interesting, update and we'll see how it turns out...till then, Zirra
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