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| "Otogi's Dark Angel" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: DEG On: June 28, 2005 21:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm. It is an okay story, your grammer is exceptionally exceptional! (Some fics I read, the english is teruhbull!) It seems a bit cliche though. It seems a bit too convenient that Otogi, the one who wants to get to know her more and what-not is the one who is going to show her around, especially since ultimately he will be the love interest of Kozue (I think that was how you spell it.) I've seen that kind of thing. That doesn't mean your story isn't good though. I think it has potential! I just thought I would try and help you, from one writer to another. ^-^ Hope to read more!
| Reviewed By: Lily Fairy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2005 15:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
Kaiba's not a jerk! He's just...preoccupied sometimes. I'm enjoying this fic, and be sure to update soon!
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