Title: ok?....
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 15:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok your chapters are really messed up and are too confuzing to read! ok on chapter 2 you skiped somthing and i got totaly lost your paragraphs and "talking" need to be seperated! and you online conversation how did she get there? you like totaly skiping some information and plotline (if you have any) do you need an editor? someone to help you? because i like your fic and it would be nicer if i could read it without hurting my eyes trying to read it! ^__^ no offence!so keep up your good work and update again soon pleasE? and if you want me as your editor to make your story nicer a bit then E-mail me at MEAN_Punk@kiwibox.com ok? i'm not trying to be mean but this was actually confuzing but and i liked it from what i could read seeing on how you jumped alot..... well keep up your good work....
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