| "A turning point" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] |
Reviewed By: slancaster113 On: July 12, 2005 17:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay!! Thank you for sending me that link!! You are awsome! 0.o Are they taking them to court to see who will get custity (Sp??) of Emily? And why does Emily's mom want her back if not to beat her? Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Heie On: July 10, 2005 22:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is a great story and I can't wait to see how it plays out! I always knew that Heie was really a "softy" at heart (even though he may be Bipolar)! The storyline is very well drawn out and the visualizations given through the words is intense! I could actually see this coming out in the series! The material is not too farfetched but a little "life-changing" for Heie. All-in-all it would make one of the best episodes (or couple of episodes) in Yu Yu Hakusho! OH YEAH! and bravo on the portrayal of the characters! I felt that it would truly play out that way in the series (except for the part of Yusuke apologizing like 3 times to Heie, maybe once but I dont think 3)! With a few grammatical errors here and there and a few very minor "flaws" (if you would count them as such as they are opinion-based) I would still give this story a very solid 9/10!
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