Title: Between the Lines
Reviewed By: Triple Peeps [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 13:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Review for chapters 1-3: Some parts either were confusing or not quite clear (i.e. "James looks at me, his green-ish blue eyes looking at her lazilly" from chapter 1 come to mind). Proofing for clarity would definitely help this fic. Otherwise, though, it's alright. I like how your main character is both the narrator to this group of high school students while sorting out through her own emotions, not really letting anyone else know how she's feeling inside, despite her concerns about her best friend and her little brother. I do notice that alot of goths seem to attend that school. :) Overall, not bad.
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