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| "Shikigami" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] | Reviewed By: mykala On: August 11, 2006 16:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really love this i hope that you will add some more on soon
| Reviewed By: SoutasSister (not signed in) On: August 09, 2006 22:26 CDT
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Good grief, been a long time, hasn't it? But, damn, the wait was worth it! Your phrasing and humor always make me laugh and the interaction between Kagome and Inuyasha is wonderful. I like the way you've kept them in-character and still made them seem fresh and new. This last chapter was superb and I can't wait to see what happened to everyone and who this fake Kaede is. :)
| Title: FFRG Review-Chapter 1
Reviewed By: Sari-15 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2005 23:51 CDT
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Thanks for submitting to FFRG. Really not too much to critique in this chapter. You have Kagome's mindset, internal thought, and motivation all set up and in character. I love how she wants to get stronger, feeling like the weakest link (when she is most likely one of the strongest.) *Random Sari question* Do you think Kagome realizes that InuYasha needs to feel needed? That the fact that she trusts him to protect her...makes him trust her more? Maybe this is where you are going with this...(I am not you I have no clue where you are heading...lol) Just a random thought I had re-reading this chapter. This chapter is perfectly set up, you dropped us right in the thick of everything...right as everything is about to go wrong. It's a great way to keep readers interested. As for any formatting problems you might be having...go into website feedback on the forums and there is a thread for formatting issues. Easy way to figure out why some things go a littly wacky on the site. Thanks for submitting to FFRG. Your writing style always entertains me, your voice is just hilarious. And your edits to chapter 7 were great.
| Title: FFRG
Reviewed By: Rebecca aka Forlorn Essence On: September 18, 2005 18:40 CDT
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I very much like this fic. I love the storyline and the conflicts between Kagome and her family about the route of her life. I do have a concern that you should double space, because I'm sure others beside myself have had or are having difficulty reading your story. I found that you have excellent grammer, yet have the occasional spelling error. I'm sure finding yourself a beta would help you keep those errors to a minimum. Also, your wording sounds very mature and sophisticated, but I find it choppy at times and sounding forced. Try to make the sentences smooth and fluid and it will be more appealing to your readers' eye. Thank you for submitting your fiction or FFRG. Good luck with the remainder of your fic. -FE*
| Reviewed By: zab On: September 18, 2005 12:18 CDT
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very amusing ^^ i like it muchly. i can't wait for fanservice! i'm feling rather lazy, so i won't give any detailed review, just praise for a cute cute funny story. i'm alittle confused to sesshomaru's role in the story, though. maybe as the story goes on it'll become clearer.
| Reviewed By: Azelle [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2005 01:38 CDT
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I absolutely love this story and your originality. I've honestly never run across a story dealing with Kagome making Shikigami (no matter what her success/failure rate), and not only that, but it's incredibly funny, and very well-written. You've outdone most of the Inuyasha writer's out there with those traits alone, which is a sad thing to say, but undeniably true. Anyway, since you've added chapter seven here ( In know it was already at FF.net), I hope that means new chapters are coming, but take your time if they're not. Never good attempting to rush a muse. :D Again, just wanted to say that this is such a wonderful story, and thank you for writing it! :D
| Title: FFARG review-chapter 6
Reviewed By: Sari-15 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2005 10:24 CDT
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Thanks for submitting to FFARG. Imagine my surprise when this fell into our little review thread. To start, rereading this really makes me respect your dialogue skills. Your banter between each character is not only very incharacter...but hilarious. The dream sequence at the beginning of the chapter was the only thing I had difficulty with. Flashbacks and dream sequences should be done in a way that they blend into the chapter, yet the readers know that's what is going on. You should never have to tell the readers that someone is dreaming, you have the skills to get that across in your writing. Try reverse formatting the paragraphs that are part of the dream, and let the hanyou acknowledge the fact that it is the dream to the readers through his thoughts during them. See if that flows better for you. The characters did a good job of staying in character during this chapter, I thought. Anything that was even questionable...could be due to the nature of the situation. The only forced humor/ooc, although I laughed when I read it...was InuYasha's bad hair day comment. I just can't see him being THAT perceptive of the female mind...LOL. Other then that, I had no problems with the ending...Yasha trusts Kagome...Kagome would never do THAT...therefore THAT is not the Kagome shikigami. Simple reasoning...but very Yasha. Thanks for submitting...and welcome to Mediaminer.
| Reviewed By: Cougiecat On: July 13, 2005 16:36 CDT
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I love this story! Need to put the rest of what you have on Media miner and then put up the next chapter. *makes dumb Kagome puppy eyes* Please... You know you want to...
| Reviewed By: fluffyearedinulvr2 On: July 03, 2005 20:35 CDT
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" Will the REAL Kagome please stand up!" i really like it! It's so entertaining! Im really curious about the fith one though. Makes me wonder....does kagome have an evil side? Anyways, good job.
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