| "Lost and Found: Royal Line Blues" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2011 15:00 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I can't believe I didn't read ur stories sooner. You are an amazing writer. I can't wait to read your other fics. You probably don't read these reviews anymore, but I just wanted to let you know how much I love this fic. |
Reviewed By: utsukushi [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2006 10:39 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
First I'd like to say that this is a really great story. I've enjoyed reading it a lot. I've actually just started reading it about 3 days ago and I'm hooked. I think that you have quite a bit of talent. I do want to warn you that maybe it might be time to end the story because some of the newer chapter contradict the older ones quite a bit. Also the overall clarity of the chapters has changed quite a bit. Sometimes it's hard to foll what's going on. I do have a few issues with the story and some of the contradictions in it. For example: Chapter 4 and 42 contradict each other with the information about Vegeta's sexual history concerning Jennlyn. At first he got her at 18 and kept her for five years. Then it was he got her when she was 17 and kept her for 3 years. In chapter 4 it was also clearly stated that he never shared her with anyone else. But in 42 he loaned her out. Moreover you have her being attacked by the Ginyu force in chapter 4 and then Bok Choi in 42. Also chapter 42 contradicts Vegeta's lack of experience with kissing. Another discrepancy that threw me for a huge loop was the changing of Tomique's name to Tomakt. I was really confused about that. In Chapter 43. I guess those are the major ones. There are a few minor ones but may be they'll be explained later. I hope that you see this as contructive criticism as I am truly enjoying your story.
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Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2005 21:26 EST
Comment/Review:
did you mean to end chapter 33 that way?
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Reviewed By: bulma_the_babe On: September 21, 2005 20:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey u!! its your best fan Christine. finally got a chance to snatch the rest of this up and read it. its amazing!!! this is by far one of the best bulma vegeta stories out there and definately one of the most original!!! keep it up girl and gimme a call whenever u need an idea or run outta steam :D Christine ;p
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