|"FFC One Shot: Be Careful What You Wish For" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ]|
| Reviewed By: pardusardens [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2004 16:50 CDT|
Style of Writing: 8 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10
Good! I like the interesting concept of Celena/Selena/whatever meeting Dilandau, since I do know a LITTLE bit about Escaflowne. Unfortunately, there's a lot I don't know, so I'm sure there are references which didn't really carry a lot of meaning for me, personally. Also, there were the grammar, punctuation and spelling issues which, although they didn't WRECK the story, always distract and detract. That being said, I don't want to emphasize it as something flawed, but as something that could be tweaked a lot and made better in certain areas. Some stuff like the aphrodesiac and so on seemed...... how to put it... I guess I'd say that it's perfectly valid as an event, but didn't seem to have a lot of literary value, given the context. That is to say, SINCE it was a one-shot ,and it ended where it did, especially with that particular wish on Van's part, I didn't get the impression that all of that was really necessary. But that's just my take on it! And, of course, it would have been much better if somewhere in it, someone had said MOERU!!!
| Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2002 21:35 CST|
And Dilandau looked way to interest in her.
Shouldn't that be And Dilaudau looked way too interested in her? Or am I just confusing myself?
In anycase the plot is great, unfortunately it was a one-shot. Fanalia u should lengthen this!! Your writing style is very good and your story's are usually so interesting at least from the ones I've read so far. Tell me if u ever decide to chapter this!
I know they'll never be but DxC...*sighs to herself* Why do I have an attraction for the most unlikely pairings?
| Reviewed By: Squall'sScar On: January 30, 2002 11:08 CST|
Style of Writing: 10 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
This was funny! There were many spelling and grammar errors, but not enough to ruin the story. I enjoyed the story, nevertheless!!
| Reviewed By: Phantom Angel On: January 28, 2002 21:37 CST|
ahahahha, lol! that was sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo funny! you shoulda let celena and dilandau to make out more! they're the most perfect couple! lol! i loved your fic! ahahahha *runs off laughing*