Reviewed By: Figaro On: February 26, 2002 18:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is very cool, Time Lady, and I'm really getting into it, but there's just one thing: Between the first and second chapter there's an obvious gap in the sense of timeline. I know that it doesn't take a genious to figure out what happened in that time, but how did it happen? What were her first feelings? How did she react at first to the different settings? What did she think of her crew when she first met them, and how did she get to be captain? Who gave her her first assignment, and where did she have to go? There's a lot of great unwritten potential in this, along with the talent that's already there. Filling in between the lines would be great. |
